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Some people believe that all the company decisions should be taken by the managers whereas others think it is better to include employees while making decisions Discuss both the points and give your opinion v.6

Some people believe that all the company decisions should be taken by the managers whereas others think it is better to include employees while making decisions 6
Opinions are divided on whether to involve the organizations' staff with the management in every decision-making process. In my opinion, important company decisions should be taken by only managers. The idea of staff involvement in every company decisions is advocated by people because it improves the employee and employer relationship, and projects different angles on the decision table. With regards to the former, when the workers of an enterprise are asked to share their opinions and ideas before launching any new company policy, they feel valued and consider themselves as a significant contributor to the team. As a result, they raise their level of efforts and stay committed to the organization. It is also believed that when more minds are involved in decision-making, more ideas are brought into the light, which would otherwise have been overlooked. However, the above arguments can be rejected by considering the sense of individuality and confidentiality involved when employees are also a part of the crucial decisions taken by the managers. As far as individual opinions are concerned, the company associates are most likely to support the ideas for an individual benefit. However, the management has to be unbiased and set the policies which are for the benefit of the overall organization. In additions to this, it is also difficult for the leaders to reach at any conclusion when there are tons of individual opinions. At the same time, there are some situations when confidential documents are taken under consideration while making decisions and disclosure of such confidential information to employees is not a feasible option for the management. Therefore, security could be an issue when employees are also involved in important decisions. In conclusion, even though the inclusion of workforce paves the way to a stronger employee and employer relationship but I believe that certain important decisions demand confidentiality and are better taken by the management.
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management
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opinion
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important
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company
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decisions
should
be taken
by
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only
managers.

The
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idea
of staff involvement in every
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company
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decisions
is advocated
by
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people
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because
it
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improves
the
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employee
and employer relationship, and projects
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different
angles on the
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decision
table.
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
With regards to
the former, when the workers of an enterprise
are asked
to share their
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opinions
and
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ideas
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before
launching any new
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company
policy, they feel valued and consider themselves as a significant contributor to the team.
As a result
, they raise their level of efforts and stay committed to the organization. It is
also
believed that when more minds
are involved
in decision-making, more
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ideas
are brought
into the light, which would
otherwise
have
been overlooked
.

However
, the above arguments can
be rejected
by considering the sense of individuality and confidentiality involved when
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employees
are
also
a part of the crucial
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decisions
taken by the managers. As far as individual
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opinions
are concerned
, the
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company
associates are most likely to support the
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ideas
for an individual benefit.
However
, the
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management
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has to
be unbiased
and set the policies which are for the benefit of the
overall
organization. In additions to this, it is
also
difficult for the leaders to reach at any conclusion when there are tons of individual
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opinions
. At the same time, there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
situations when confidential documents
are taken
under consideration while making
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decisions
and disclosure of such confidential information to
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employees
is not a feasible option for the
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management
.
Therefore
, security could be an issue when
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employees
are
also
involved in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
important
decisions.

In conclusion
,
even though
the inclusion of workforce paves the way to a stronger
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employee
and employer relationship
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but
I believe that certain
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important
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decisions
demand confidentiality and are better taken by the
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management
.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
28Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that all the company decisions should be taken by the managers whereas others think it is better to include employees while making decisions 6

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4 paragraphs
312 words
6.0
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