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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? to improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors v.737

to improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors v. 737
Have you ever thought about the impact of professors on quality of education? I wholeheartedly believe that increasing professors salary will increase the quality of education for many reasons. Firstly, professor will be more encouraged on teaching. in addition the social respect of teaching will be improve. Lastly, professors does not have to spend time in an additional job. First and for most, a good income will increase professors tendency to teach. professors with higher salary are more energetic than others plus they are strongly motive for spending time on their classrooms. According to a recent opinion poll which was held in Tabriz university about sixty three percent of participants stated that, teachers with higher income has better performance in classroom hence, I think there is no need to say that an energetic and powerful teachers and professors will improve quality of education because of their strong classes and teachings. In my point of view, a higher income for teaching job will increase the social respect of the job. I mean, if university professors or school teachers receive higher salary, then many of young people will attend to continue their education to attain a teaching position. With no doubt it will be strong motivation for younger students and children while choosing their future job. A prime example from my own story may shed some light on this issue. One of my family members was the first computer professor and a highly- educated woman in our country, seeing her having a great life plus sufficient income, every young family members are trying to be a university professor. Lastly, In the university I am currently studying, most of the professors has a second job to improve their financial life thus unfortunately they do not have much time to attend research and extra reading for their classes and projects. DR Pour Sharifi, my professor, In addition, head of university professors association, stated that a university member should have only one job and his or her additional job should be research, in order to improve quality of education. In conclusion, I strongly believe that, universities and governments should increase their teachers salaries to motive them for a better teaching. furthermore, a high income will encourage young students to pursue their ways. Lastly, it will help professors to have more time for research instead of having a second job.
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professors
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professor
will be more encouraged on
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teaching
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in
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addition
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improve
.
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and for most, a
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tendency to teach.
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professors
with higher
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salary
are more energetic than others plus they are
strongly
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time
on their classrooms. According to a recent opinion poll which
was held
in Tabriz
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university
about
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sixty three
percent of participants stated that,
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teachers
with higher
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income
has better performance in classroom
hence
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think
there is no need to say that an energetic and powerful
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teachers
and
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professors
will
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improve
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quality
of
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education
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because
of their strong classes and teachings.

In my point of view, a higher
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income
for
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teaching
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job
will
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increase
the social respect of the
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job
. I mean, if
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university
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professors
or school
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teachers
receive higher
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salary
, then
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many
of young
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people
will attend to continue their
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education
to attain a
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teaching
position. With no doubt it will be strong motivation for younger students and children while choosing their future
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job
. A prime example from my
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own
story may shed
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some
light on this issue. One of my family members was the
first
computer
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professor
and a
highly
- educated woman in our country, seeing her having a great life plus sufficient
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income
, every young family members are trying to be a
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university
professor.

Lastly
, In the
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university
I am
currently
studying, most of the
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professors
has a second
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job
to
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improve
their financial life
thus
unfortunately they do not have much
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time
to attend research and extra reading for their classes and projects. DR Pour
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Sharifi
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,
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, head of
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university
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professors
association, stated that a
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member should have
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one
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job
should be research, in order to
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quality
of education.

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strongly
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universities
and
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their
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teachers
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salaries
to motive them for a better
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.
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furthermore
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income
will encourage young students to pursue their ways.
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professors
to have more
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for research
instead
of having a second
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job
.
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IELTS essay to improve the quality of education, universities should spend more money on salaries for university professors v. 737

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
394 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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