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Some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and uses up the world's fuel resources. v.4

Some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and uses up the world's fuel resources. v. 4
Air travel has become highly popular and it can easily bee understood if we only look at the upcoming and departed number of flights in a busy aviation. Since the air travel saves a great deal of time, most of the business persons today chose air travel prior to any other root. Travelling through the air has many advantages as well as many disadvantages. In my opinion, important air travel should not be restricted but when the air travel becomes a mean of luxury then it must be restricted. At first, no other route can take a business person so fast that an air transport can and people, especially opulent business executives use this route to reach the destination fast. Then, travelling to a far destination or a distant country, air transportation system is a must. For instance, travelling from India to the USA is quite impossible through road, ship or in any other vehicle and people in these cases have no alternative than to using an airway. But nowadays it has become a fashion for people to use airways even for a very short distance. Air transportation systems are using a large portion of world's reserve fuel and affecting the environment by polluting it. So restriction should be applied in these cases. For example: if a destination takes only 2-4 hours  in road then the idea of travelling through air is pointless and highly extravagant. A government should apply strict rules so that an aviation company can distinguish a true business executive and a tourist and give the business person the option to travel through the air and encourage the tourist to take an alternative route.
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travel
has become
highly
popular and it can
easily
bee understood if we
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only
look at the upcoming and departed number of flights in a busy aviation. Since the
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air
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travel
saves a great deal of time, most of the
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business
persons
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today
chose
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air
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travel
prior to any other root.
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through
the
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air
has
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many
advantages
as well
as
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many
disadvantages. In my opinion,
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important
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air
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travel
should not
be restricted
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but
when the
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air
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travel
becomes a mean of luxury then it
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must
be restricted
.

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first
, no other route can take a
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business
person
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fast
that an
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transport can and
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people
,
especially
opulent
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business
executives
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use
this route to reach the destination
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fast
. Then,
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travelling
to a far destination or a distant country,
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air
transportation system is a
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must
.
For instance
,
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travelling
from India to the USA is quite impossible
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through
road, ship or in any other vehicle and
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people
in these cases have no alternative than to using an airway.

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nowadays it has become a fashion for
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people
to
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airways even for a
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very
short distance.
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Air
transportation systems are using a large portion of world's reserve fuel and affecting the environment by polluting it.
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So
restriction should
be applied
in these cases.
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: if a destination takes
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only
2-4 hours
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in road then the
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idea
of
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travelling
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through
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air
is pointless and
highly
extravagant. A
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government
should apply strict
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rules
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so
that an aviation
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company
can distinguish a true
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business
executive and a tourist and give the
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business
person the option to
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travel
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through
the
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air
and encourage the tourist to take an alternative route.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that air travel should be restricted because it causes serious pollution and uses up the world's fuel resources. v. 4

Essay
  American English
3 paragraphs
277 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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