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Some people believe that advertisements are misleading for children, while advertiser claim that they provide knowledge. Give your opinion. v.1

Some people believe that advertisements are misleading for children, while advertiser claim that they provide knowledge. Give your opinion. v. 1
Every year crime rate is increasing gradually, people are recommended to give hanging punishment to all the criminals who are troubling to others with their moves. Many persons have had the faith that thousands of other ways are present to reduce the unfair activities. I strongly believe that, society should try for once to give the good lesson to the offender by giving some social works or physical retribution to make him realize, otherwise announce imprisonment for the whole life rather than death punishment. On the one side, people are expecting to make fair justice, and according to them, it is better to give punishment of “hang” for the crimes which are harmful, for instance, For the rape cases, murder and supplying banned items and of inhaled drugs. These all activities not only effect to the one person, but also impacting badly to the whole society physically as well as mentally. Nobody is having the right to play with the life of others, if anyone is doing the courage it should be controlled by hanging them. If one individual will be hanged, another will take steps back automatically, consequently the rate of crimes will go down and turn to zero one day. On the other side, numerous people strongly believe, nobody is criminal by birth; it is society and surrounded people, who motivate them sometimes to attempt wrong things for their own benefits. For example, drug dealers. They are washing the mind of young generation by giving them a threat or greed to relish the life in other way and become rich soon. To protect the teenager, it is always better to give them second chance by realizing them about their crime. Society should give them counselling, education or shift them to rehab centres to learn the importance of life, if the human will repeat his mistake only then it is the way to take hard steps by taking him in custody for the longest time or for the whole life to set a good example for others. In conclusion, death is not the solution to do fair justice; I reiterate that unwanted and offended activities should be handled according to the nature of the crime. Every problem could be sought with little effort and being a responsible character of the nation, it is our responsibility to educate the children in an effective way to control all the criminal moves.
Every year
crime
rate is increasing
gradually
,
people
are recommended
to
give
hanging punishment to all the criminals who are troubling to others with their
moves
.
Many
persons have had the faith that thousands of
other
ways are present to
reduce
the unfair activities. I
strongly
believe that,
society
should try for once to
give
the
good
lesson to the offender by giving
some
social works or physical retribution to
make
him realize,
otherwise
announce imprisonment for the whole
life
rather
than death punishment.

On the one side,
people
are expecting to
make
fair
justice, and according to them, it is better to
give
punishment of “hang” for the
crimes
which are harmful,
for instance
, For the rape cases, murder and supplying banned items and of inhaled drugs. These all activities not
only
effect
to the one person,
but
also
impacting
badly
to the whole
society
physically
as well
as mentally. Nobody is having the right to play with the
life
of others, if anyone is doing the courage it should
be controlled
by hanging them. If one individual will
be hanged
, another will take steps back
automatically
,
consequently
the rate of
crimes
will go down and turn to zero one day.

On the
other
side, numerous
people
strongly
believe, nobody is criminal by birth; it is
society
and surrounded
people
, who motivate them
sometimes
to attempt
wrong
things for their
own
benefits.
For example
, drug dealers. They are washing the mind of young generation by giving them a threat or greed to relish the
life
in
other
way and become rich
soon
. To protect the
teenager
, it is always better to
give
them second chance by realizing them about their
crime
.
Society
should
give
them counselling, education or shift them to rehab
centres
to learn the importance of
life
, if the human will repeat his mistake
only
then it is the way to take
hard
steps by taking him in custody for the longest time or for the whole
life
to set a
good
example for others.

In conclusion
, death is not the solution to do
fair
justice; I reiterate that unwanted and offended activities should
be handled
according to the nature of the
crime
. Every problem could
be sought
with
little
effort and being a responsible character of the nation, it is our responsibility to educate the children
in an effective way
to control all the criminal
moves
.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe that advertisements are misleading for children, while advertiser claim that they provide knowledge. Give your opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
400 words
7.5
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