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In some countries in Europe some children from the age of 11 or 13 go to schools to learn more practical skills that will help them get a job Other children stay in schools which provide a more general academic education What should schools do to prepare v.1

In some countries in Europe some children from the age of 11 or 13 go to schools to learn more practical skills that will help them get a job Other children stay in schools which provide a more general academic education What should schools do to prepare v. 1
In the last decade, many countries have undergone development in its economic sector. However, this often takes place in only some parts of the country, usually the cities, leaving the rural areas lagging behind, resulting in an increase in the standard of living in cities compared to the towns and villages. This essay will discuss some problems associated with this and will also suggest solutions that might lessen the situation. Problems associated with selected cities having a high living standard compared to others are obvious and numerous. However, only two main problems will be discussed here today. First, people tend to migrate to places with high living standard because this is directly proportional to better infrastructures, better opportunities, effective and efficient transportation as well as high skill demand. Often, people will leave their villages to the cities for these reasons, leaving the villages deserted and cities are, in turn, being over-populated, over congested and over polluted. Second, when people migrate in search of better opportunities, they pay taxes to their new city of residence. As a result, the villages with reduced living standard are unable to generate internal proceeds. Thus, the problems associated with selected higher living standard in a country are an insufficient generation of internal proceeds in the villages and over population in the cities. There are ways this issue can be alleviated. To start with, the authorities should issue a policy that every individual must reside in his/her state of origin. Because of this, skilled workers are forced to migrate back and companies will be forced to establish branches in villages because these skills are no more concentrated in a particular region. In addition, the authorities should also enforce all states to uniformly distribute their generated revenues so that no state will be indigent. For instance, a government policy was passed two decades ago, in Australia when faced with a similar situation. A survey was taken recently and this shows that the standard of living was uniform across the states within the country. In conclusion, the economy of many countries has developed in the past years. Yet, often times, only the cities have experienced a high living standard leading to numerous problems in the nation. This write-up discussed these problems, which include lower internal revenue and increased population. Furthermore, this write-up suggested two solutions that can mitigate these problems, which are government policies with regard to immigration and equal distribution of revenue amongst regions.
In the last decade,
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many
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countries
have undergone development in its economic sector.
However
, this
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often
takes place in
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only
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some
parts of the
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country
,
usually
the
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cities
, leaving the rural areas lagging behind, resulting in an increase in the
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standard
of
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living
in
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cities
compared to the towns and
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villages
. This essay will discuss
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some
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problems
associated with this and will
also
suggest solutions that might lessen the situation.

Problems associated with selected
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cities
having a
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high
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living
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standard
compared to others are obvious and numerous.
However
,
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only
two main
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problems
will
be discussed
here
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today
.
First
,
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people
tend to migrate to places with
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high
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living
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standard
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because
this is
directly
proportional to better infrastructures, better opportunities, effective and efficient transportation
as well
as
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high
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skill
demand.
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,
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people
will
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leave
their
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villages
to the
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cities
for these reasons, leaving the
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villages
deserted and
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cities
are, in turn, being over-populated, over congested and over polluted. Second, when
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people
migrate in search of better opportunities, they pay taxes to their new city of residence.
As a result
, the
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villages
with
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reduced
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living
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standard
are unable to generate internal proceeds.
Thus
, the
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problems
associated with selected higher
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living
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standard
in a
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country
are an insufficient generation of internal proceeds in the
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villages
and over population in the cities.

There are ways this issue can
be alleviated
. To
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start
with, the authorities should issue a policy that every individual
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must
reside in his/her
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state
of origin.
Because of this
, skilled workers
are forced
to migrate back and
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companies
will
be forced
to establish branches in
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villages
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because
these
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skills
are no more concentrated in a particular region.
In addition
, the authorities should
also
enforce all
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states
to
uniformly
distribute their generated revenues
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so
that no
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state
will be indigent.
For instance
, a
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government
policy
was passed
two decades ago, in Australia when faced with a similar situation. A survey
was taken
recently and this
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shows
that the
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standard
of
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living
was uniform across the
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states
within the country.

In conclusion
, the economy of
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many
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countries
has developed in the past years.
Yet
,
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often
times,
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only
the
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cities
have experienced a
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high
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living
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standard
leading to numerous
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problems
in the nation. This write-up discussed these
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problems
, which include lower internal revenue and increased population.
Furthermore
, this write-up suggested two solutions that can mitigate these
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problems
, which are
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government
policies with regard to immigration and equal distribution of revenue amongst regions.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay In some countries in Europe some children from the age of 11 or 13 go to schools to learn more practical skills that will help them get a job Other children stay in schools which provide a more general academic education What should schools do to prepare v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
407 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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