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Some people believe that a good way to reduce crime is longer sentences. Others may think there are alternative ways to this problem. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.3

Some people believe that a good way to reduce crime is longer sentences. Others may think there are alternative ways to this problem. v. 3
A number of people think that longer sentences can help reduce the crime rate. However, this issue is not straightforward and arguments can be made against the idea. This essay will discuss the debate and give a concluding view. On the one hand, those who support the longer penalties such as life in a prison for years cite the various benefits. These range from the decrease in the crime rate to gaining the social safety. In order to reduce the crime rate, criminals particularly murderers should be punished by the severest and the longest sentences. Due to the fact that they can realize serious consequences of their fault. If criminals do not accept the longer sentences, they will commit their errors in different ways. In addition, another argument is that living in the safe society is a real right for people. If governments did not consider tough punishments to criminals, the crime rate would increase in societies. Thus, individuals will have to live in an unsafe society in which everyone could permit yourself to do anything wrong without considering others. By contrast, the opponents of the view point that there are a lot of alternative approaches by which states could punish the criminals. This group believes that living in prison, for instance, can be enough beneficial neither the societies nor the criminals. Indeed, states should employ the criminals to do some activities which can be helpful to people. For example, there is a wide range of community services that can be considered as the effective sentences. These types of punishments are useful not only to people or governments but also to the criminals. On the other words, the criminals could learn how it is possible to be useful to their societies. On balance, although considering longer sentences may be required in some cases, it seems obvious that these kinds of penalties cannot have positive effects on both the crime rate and making changes into the criminals' attitude.
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can
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help
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reduce
the
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crime
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rate
.
However
, this issue is not straightforward and arguments can
be made
against the
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idea
. This essay will discuss the debate and give a concluding view.

On the one hand, those who support the
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longer
penalties such as life in a prison for years cite the various benefits. These range from the decrease in the
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crime
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rate
to gaining the social safety. In order to
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reduce
the
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crime
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rate
,
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criminals
particularly
murderers should
be punished
by the severest and the longest
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sentences
. Due to the fact that they can realize serious consequences of their fault. If
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criminals
do not accept the
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longer
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sentences
, they will commit their errors in
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different
ways.
In addition
, another argument is that living in the safe
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society
is a real right for
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people
. If
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governments
did not consider tough punishments to
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criminals
, the
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crime
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rate
would increase in
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societies
.
Thus
, individuals will
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have to
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live
in an unsafe
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society
in which everyone could permit yourself to do anything
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wrong
without considering others.

By contrast, the opponents of the view point that there are
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a lot of
alternative approaches by which states could punish the
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criminals
. This group believes that living in prison,
for instance
, can be
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enough
beneficial neither the
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societies
nor the
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criminals
.
Indeed
, states should employ the
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criminals
to do
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some
activities which can be helpful to
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people
.
For example
, there is a wide range of community services that can
be considered
as the effective
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sentences
. These types of punishments are useful not
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only
to
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people
or
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governments
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but
also
to the
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criminals
. On the other words, the
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criminals
could learn how it is possible to be useful to their societies.

On balance, although considering
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longer
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sentences
may
be required
in
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some
cases, it seems obvious that these kinds of penalties cannot have
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positive
effects on both the
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crime
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rate
and making
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changes
into the
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IELTS essay Some people believe that a good way to reduce crime is longer sentences. Others may think there are alternative ways to this problem. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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