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Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read whereas others believe only printed material should be used. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read whereas others believe only printed material should be used. v. 1
Even though many argue that most effective method for a child to start reading is by mere use of books available on Internet whereas others opine to choose traditional method of printed books, and I agree. Online books are gaining popularity due to their ease of availability. Most of these books can be purchased in their digital form anytime without having to go out to a book store. A lot of websites, nowadays, not only provide books, but also let children reach out to range of activities. For instance, amazon kindle let enjoy a number of books in digital form along with audio version. This way children feel involved and are able to imagine while looking at the pictures. On the other hand, traditional way of reading from paper books, is definitely much more healthier option. Reading from a book does not cause any eyesight side effects and physical stress such as sore neck and back which on contrary, results from staring at computer or TV for long hours. Therefore, children are forced to wear eyesight glasses from a younger age which is a serious health hazard for a child. This also helps children to develop a sense of connection with their books every time they touch and feel it. In conclusion, benefits of online reading are inevitable, whereas printed material have their own positive effects. However, in my opinion, the most healthy option is to choose a mix blend of both online and paper books interchangeably to help a child gain maximum befits of both methods.
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argue that most effective method for a child to
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start
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reading
is by mere
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use
of
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books
available on Internet whereas others opine to choose traditional method of printed
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, and I
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agree
.

Online
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are gaining popularity due to their
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ease
of availability. Most of these
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books
can be
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purchased
in their digital form anytime without having to go out to a
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book
store.
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websites, nowadays, not
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provide
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books
,
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also
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let
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children
reach out to range of activities.
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amazon kindle
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let
enjoy a number of
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books
in digital form along with audio version. This way
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children
feel involved and are able to imagine while looking at the pictures.

On the other hand
, traditional way of
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reading
from paper
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books
, is definitely much
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more healthier
option.
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from a
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book
does not cause any eyesight side effects and physical
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stress
such as sore neck and back which on contrary, results from staring at computer or TV for long hours.
Therefore
,
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children
are forced
to wear eyesight glasses from a younger age which is a serious health hazard for a child. This
also
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helps
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children
to develop a sense of connection with their
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books
every time they touch and feel it.

In conclusion
, benefits of online
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reading
are inevitable, whereas printed material have their
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own
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positive
effects.
However
, in my opinion, the most healthy option is to choose a mix blend of both online and paper
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books
interchangeably
to
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help
a child gain maximum befits of both methods.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
19Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people believe online reading materials should only be used for a child to learn to read whereas others believe only printed material should be used. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
257 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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