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Some people believe government should spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.3

It is obvious fact that traffic congestion become a serious problem around world. For group of people constructing broad and additional roads is a solution, while other claim that government should spend money on manufacturing train and subway lines to overcome this problem. On the one hand, there are clear reasons why the extension and construction of new roadways can decrease the amount of traffic. Firstly, the available roads are not wide enough to serve the quantity of vehicles on the way. It leads to traffic jams, especially in cities with high level of population. Secondly, if more roads constructed well, people have choice to use another route and avoid traffic congestion. However, better and comfortable roads can encourage people to buy cars and traffic disorder will increase in short periods. Contrarily, there are also many evidence why government must spend budget on train and subway lines, to tackle traffic jams. Primarily, trains speed greater than buses or cars so population generally prefer a train to a car, mainly employees. Existing roads to some extend will be free from traffic congestion. Moreover, in cities, there is not sufficiently land for building or extending roads. In comparison, a subway and train network manufactures underground and extra land is unnecessary. To sum up, constructing new and broad ways reduces traffic but it is a temporary solution as better roads encourage people to acquire private vehicles. I totally agree that government must allocate funds to train and subway sphere rather than investing money on roads.
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traffic
congestion become a serious problem around world. For group of
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people
constructing broad and additional
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roads
is a solution, while other claim that
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government
should spend money on manufacturing
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train
and
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subway
lines to overcome this problem.

On the one hand, there are
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clear
reasons why the extension and construction of new roadways can decrease the amount of
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traffic
.
Firstly
, the available
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roads
are not wide
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enough
to serve the quantity of vehicles on the way. It leads to
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traffic
jams,
especially
in cities with high level of population.
Secondly
, if more
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roads
constructed well,
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people
have choice to
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use
another route and avoid
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traffic
congestion.
However
, better and comfortable
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roads
can encourage
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people
to
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buy
cars and
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traffic
disorder will increase in short periods.

Contrarily
, there are
also
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many evidence
why
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government
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must
spend budget on
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train
and
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lines, to tackle
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traffic
jams.
Primarily
,
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trains
speed greater than buses or cars
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so
population
generally
prefer a
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train
to a car,
mainly
employees. Existing
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roads
to
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some
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extend
will be free from
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traffic
congestion.
Moreover
, in cities, there is not
sufficiently
land for building or extending
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roads
.
In comparison
, a
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subway
and
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train
network manufactures underground and extra land is unnecessary.

To sum up, constructing new and broad ways
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reduces
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traffic
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but
it is a temporary solution as better
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roads
encourage
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people
to acquire private vehicles. I
totally
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agree
that
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government
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must
allocate funds to
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train
and
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subway
sphere
rather
than investing money on
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roads
.
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IELTS essay Some people believe government should spend money on building train and subway lines to reduce traffic congestion. Others think that building more and wider roads is the better way to reduce traffic congestion.

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  American English
4 paragraphs
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