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Some people believe companies should pay for the damage the cause to the environment, while other say that government should be responsible for such expenses. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your experience v.1

Some people believe companies should pay for the damage the cause to the environment, while other say that government should be responsible for such expenses. 1
There’s an increasing trend of individuals from various countries getting married late and having lesser number of offsprings. This essay will succinctly explain why financial stability and proper household planning are the reasons why these are rampant. Firstly, it is not uncommon to hear about folks in other climes getting married at later stages of their lives and having relatively fewer progenies. This is because, the quest to become financially buoyant and have the capacity to completely cater for the needs that arise from such union is often a priority that must not be overlooked and underestimated. As a result, more time is spent on garnering enough resources that solidly fortify them and guarantees safe havens for the incoming partners and unborn children. For instance, folks in Germany would rather wait till they own their homes and have six figures savings before any conjugal commitment. This will obviously extend the timing it takes to get married, and forces them to get hitched late. Another point to consider, is the fact that, individuals in many societies take household planning with great level of seriousness, that often make them arrive at decisions quite later than usual. For example, more time is spent discussing issues like family size, size of home, location and the likes. This amount of time-real estate, elongates planning and decisions are arrived at much later periods than usual. Studies carried out by University of Kuala Lumpor clearly explained the link between increase in marriage down time in Malaysia and need for financial and household planning. This experiment was later corroborated by other south Asian countries. Hence, certain individuals in other climes take seriously these factors when making marital plans. In conclusion, while there are positive consequences of marrying late and having children like financial stability and proper household planning, there are also certain demerits that should be noted. These include reduced time spent with children, which may lead to less bonding, that fosters trust between offsprings and parents.
There’s an increasing trend of individuals from various countries getting married late and having lesser number of
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offsprings
. This essay will
succinctly
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explain
why financial stability and proper
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household
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planning
are the reasons why these are rampant.

Firstly
, it is not uncommon to hear about folks in other climes getting married at
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later
stages of their
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lives
and having
relatively
fewer
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progenies
. This is
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because
, the quest to become
financially
buoyant and have the capacity to completely cater for the needs that arise from such union is
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often
a priority that
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must
not
be overlooked
and underestimated.
As a result
, more
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time
is spent
on garnering
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enough
resources that
solidly
fortify them and guarantees safe havens for the incoming partners and unborn children.
For instance
, folks in Germany would
rather
wait till they
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own
their homes and have six figures savings
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before
any conjugal commitment. This will
obviously
extend the timing it takes to
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get
married, and forces them to
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get
hitched late.

Another point to consider, is the fact that, individuals in
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many
societies take
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household
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planning
with great level of seriousness, that
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often
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make
them arrive at decisions quite
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later
than usual.
For example
, more
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time
is spent
discussing issues like family size, size of home, location and the likes. This amount of time-real estate, elongates
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planning
and decisions
are arrived
at much
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later
periods than usual. Studies carried out by University of
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Kuala
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Lumpor
clearly
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explained
the link between increase in marriage down
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time
in Malaysia and need for financial and
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household
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planning
. This experiment was
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later
corroborated by other south Asian countries.
Hence
, certain individuals in other climes take
seriously
these factors when making marital plans.

In conclusion
, while there are
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positive
consequences of marrying late and having children like financial stability and proper
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household
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planning
, there are
also
certain demerits that should
be noted
. These include
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reduced
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time
spent with children, which may lead to less bonding, that fosters trust between
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offsprings
and parents.
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IELTS essay Some people believe companies should pay for the damage the cause to the environment, while other say that government should be responsible for such expenses. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
329 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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