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Some people argue that capital punishment is good for a country. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some people argue that capital punishment is good for a country. v. 2
Crime rates have been on the rise in the past decades, despite the culprit aware of the consequences he shall face for the offence committed by him. It is often argued that, capital punishment is beneficial for the well being of the nation and the citizens attached to it. I strongly concur with the fact that capital punishment should be improvised. To begin with, punishments are essential for maintaining peace throughout the country. People are familiar with the law and order of their nation and if the law is broken, it usually means that injustice has taken place and harmony is being disturbed. Punishing a culprit makes the fear vanish from the minds of innocent people. For instance, Ajmal Kasab, a terrorist was killed in the attacks and peace was finally restored. On the other hand, offence rates define the character of a country. Having said this, no matter how developed or developing a country is, if the crimes committed are increasing every year it reflects a bad character of the country to the world. This leads to the downfall of the economy and many other global factors are affected. For example, tourists avoid such places where they don't feel safe or places which have a bad image in the world. This ultimately leads to the loss of economy. Hence, executing a criminal for a harsh crime and preparing several punishments according to the weightage of crimes should be done. To summarise, I strongly believe that capital punishments should be a part of law and order of the country as they will surely help maintaining peace, harmony and bring discipline to the people in the country.
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Crime
rates have been on the rise in the past decades, despite the culprit aware of the consequences he shall face for the
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offence
committed by him. It is
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often
argued that, capital
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punishment
is beneficial for the
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well being
of the nation and the citizens attached to it. I
strongly
concur with the fact that capital
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punishment
should
be improvised
.

To
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begin
with,
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punishments
are essential for maintaining peace throughout the
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country
.
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People
are familiar with the law and order of their nation and if the law
is broken
, it
usually
means that injustice has taken place and harmony is
being disturbed
. Punishing a culprit
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makes
the fear vanish from the minds of innocent
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people
.
For instance
,
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Ajmal
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Kasab
, a terrorist
was killed
in the attacks and peace was
finally
restored.

On the other hand
,
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offence
rates define the character of a
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country
. Having said this, no matter how developed or developing a
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country
is, if the
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crimes
committed are increasing every year it reflects a
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bad
character of the
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country
to the world. This leads to the downfall of the economy and
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many
other global factors are
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affected
.
For example
, tourists avoid such places where they don't feel safe or places which have a
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bad
image in the world. This
ultimately
leads to the loss of economy.
Hence
, executing a criminal for a harsh
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crime
and preparing several
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punishments
according to the weightage of
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crimes
should
be done
.

To
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summarise
, I
strongly
believe that capital
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punishments
should be a part of law and order of the
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country
as they will
surely
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help
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maintaining
peace, harmony and bring discipline to the
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people
in the
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country
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
15Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people argue that capital punishment is good for a country. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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