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Some people argue that arts, such as paintings and music, are a waste of money and the government should spend this money on other public services. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? v.11

Some people argue that arts, such as paintings and music, are a waste of money and the government should spend this money on other public services. with this statement? v. 11
It is a debatable issue, that motivate the skills like painting and music is not worthy. Instead of spending cost on these activities, authorities should incur more on other facilities like medical, infrastructure. I completely oppose this mentality, because these acts always connected us with our culture. Moreover, nowadays in these sectors individual can settle their career very well. To stay in touch with our tradition and customs these creativities is very essential. In country like India people use music for various purposes from birth to till death. In south India people use painting techniques to decorate their homes, offices and temples at different occasion such as Diwali, Onam, Pongal and many more. They believe that these things are useful to worship their lord. Some people use these activities to describe their emotions. For example, in a hindi movie name “Tare Zammen Pe” a little Ishan disclose their feeling by the way of extraordinary paintings which has been found by his teacher that he wants to say something what can not disclose through words because of understanding issues. Therefore, these things play very vital role in everyone’s life. Establishing career by the help of these skills are become famous among youngsters. People with melodious voice sang songs at different platforms like Indian Idol, Saregamapa and other reality shows and achieved a designated place like Harshdeep Kaur, Abhijeet Sawant and many more. People with these hobbies now do not need to worry about their incomes because these are god gifted skills which help to raise their finance in future. A very well famous show on colours name India’s Got Talent give an earning platform to a sand artist who was very poor and now he runs a school of this art at free of cost. Hence, these skills are not useless. Conclusively, assumption of numerous people that development of art forms are wastage of financial resources has been proved wrongly.
It is a debatable issue, that motivate the
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skills
like painting and music is not worthy.
Instead
of spending cost on these activities, authorities should incur more on other facilities like medical, infrastructure. I completely oppose this mentality,
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because
these acts always connected us with our culture.
Moreover
, nowadays in these sectors individual can settle their career
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very
well.

To stay in touch with our tradition and customs these
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creativities
is
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very
essential. In country like India
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people
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use
music for various purposes from birth to till death. In south India
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people
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use
painting techniques to decorate their homes, offices and temples at
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different
occasion such as Diwali,
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Onam
,
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Pongal
and
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many
more. They believe that these things are useful to worship their lord.
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Some
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people
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use
these activities to
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describe
their emotions.
For example
, in a
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hindi
movie name “Tare
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Zammen
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Pe
” a
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little
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Ishan
disclose their feeling by the way of extraordinary paintings which has
been found
by his teacher that he wants to say something what can not disclose through words
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because
of understanding issues.
Therefore
, these things play
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very
vital role in everyone’s life.

Establishing career by the
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help
of these
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skills
are become
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famous
among youngsters.
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People
with melodious voice sang songs at
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different
platforms like Indian Idol,
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Saregamapa
and other reality
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shows
and achieved a designated place like
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Harshdeep
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Kaur
, Abhijeet
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Sawant
and
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many
more.
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People
with these hobbies
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now
do not need to worry about their incomes
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because
these are god gifted
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skills
which
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help
to raise their finance
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in future
. A
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very
well
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famous
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show
on
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colours
name India’s
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Got
Talent give an earning platform to a sand artist who was
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very
poor and
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now
he runs a school of this art at free of cost.
Hence
, these
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skills
are not useless.

Conclusively
, assumption of numerous
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
people
that development of art forms are wastage of financial resources has
been proved
wrongly
.
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
10Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
13Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some people argue that arts, such as paintings and music, are a waste of money and the government should spend this money on other public services. with this statement? v. 11

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
319 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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