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Some people are of the opinion that being highly qualified is the only way to ensure a well-paying job. While others believe that having work experience is the best way to get a well-paying job. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.1

Some people are of the opinion that being highly qualified is the only way to ensure a well-paying job. While others believe that having work experience is the best way to get a well-paying job. v. 1
It is considered by majority of students that, the ultimate aim of being well graduated is getting highly payed jobs, while some others believe that it is better to have experience and soft skills. As university education is the last stage before the starting of career, many believes that it prepares students for employment only. Personally, I find university degrees are essential for academic placement, but experience can make difference in payments. Firstly, it is irrefutable that schooling is of crucial significance to the progress of people and which can impart professional proficiency. Many think it is easier to get an occupation with a college certificate. Secondly, Universities provide specialised learning in variety of fields such as medical, engineering, management etc. With the help of well-equipped laboratory facilities, the students are getting practical knowledge together with the academic theories. This can give them an idea about the competition in the market. Furthermore, the job interviews and the opportunity of getting a well payed job, which is the first step into the career, can be acquired through institutional studies. On the other hand, certain jobs require practice more than theoretical intelligence. In today’s world there is a high level of competition for many jobs and there are a high number of graduates or qualified people. Not only this, there are other skills needed aside from certifications. For example, even the doctors with high qualifications require to practice more to acquire surgical skills. Mostly companies require certain field related person with hug experience. For Instance, on-site service engineers are hired and well payed based on their work experience. To conclude, the price of success is hard work, dedication to the job at hand, and the determination. According to some belief that high-level degrees are the way to get high pay positions while other disagreed to this say that experience make the person valuable to get high salaries. In my opinion, work experience along with analytical skills derived from qualified education can ensure a well payed profession.
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is considered
by majority of students that, the ultimate aim of being
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well
graduated is getting
highly
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payed
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jobs
, while
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some
others believe that it is better to have
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experience
and soft
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skills
. As university education is the last stage
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before
the starting of career,
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many
believes that it prepares students for employment
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only
.
Personally
, I find university degrees are essential for academic placement,
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but
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experience
can
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make
difference in payments.

Firstly
, it is irrefutable that schooling is of crucial significance to the progress of
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people
and which can impart professional proficiency.
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Many
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think
it is easier to
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get
an occupation with a college certificate.
Secondly
, Universities provide
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specialised
learning in variety of fields such as medical, engineering, management etc. With the
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help
of well-equipped laboratory facilities, the students are getting practical knowledge together with the academic theories. This can give them an
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
idea
about the competition in the market.
Furthermore
, the
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job
interviews and the opportunity of getting a
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well
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payed
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job
, which is the
first
step into the career, can
be acquired
through institutional studies.

On the
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other
hand, certain
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jobs
require practice more than theoretical intelligence. In
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today
’s world there is a
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high
level of competition for
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many
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jobs
and there are a
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high
number of graduates or qualified
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people
. Not
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only
this, there are
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other
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skills
needed aside from certifications.
For example
, even the doctors with
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high
qualifications require
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to practice
more to acquire surgical
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skills
.
Mostly
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companies
require certain field related person with hug
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experience
.
For Instance
, on-site service engineers
are hired
and
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well
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payed
based on their work experience.

To conclude
, the price of success is
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hard
work, dedication to the
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job
at hand, and the determination. According to
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some
belief that high-level degrees are the way to
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get
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high
pay positions while
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other
disagreed to this say that
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experience
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make
the person valuable to
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get
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high
salaries. In my opinion, work
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experience
along with analytical
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skills
derived from qualified education can ensure a
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well
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payed
profession.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
31Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
6Mistakes

IELTS essay Some people are of the opinion that being highly qualified is the only way to ensure a well-paying job. While others believe that having work experience is the best way to get a well-paying job. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
334 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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