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Some people agree that children should ask for parent’s advice. Some disagree. Discuss both views and share your opinion. v.1

Some people agree that children should ask for parent’s advice. Some disagree. v. 1
It is debatable among most of the people, whether young generation should take advice from their guardian’s or not. A few people believe that guidance from parents is mandatory for children, while others argue. This essay will discuss both sides of argument in detail and put forward evidences why I favour the perspective of asking parental help by child is the effective method. Parents play a pivotal role in the physical and mental growth of the growing child. To make it more clear, children’s are not in the position of taking decisions for their future. So, they need advice from their guardians related to their studies and jobs. For instance, a study conducted by the school authorities revealed that the child can attain a valuable position in their workplace, if they are guided by their parents. In short, parent’s advice is necessary for children. There are some people who think that there is no need of any kind of advice from parents because this will suppress the thinking power of the offspring. When a child knows they would be guided by their elder ones, then they stop using their brain. This will reduce the capability of taking decision by themselves. A survey conducted by the local hospital, for example, declared that the child who are totally dependent on their parents for decision has an adverse effect on the function of the brain. Clearly, some decisions should be made by children themselves without taking any help from their parents. In conclusion, the number of individuals who favours the proposition say that children need advice from their guardian's in choosing education and future career, whereas others do not vote for it because this stops the children’s brain activity. However, in my opinion, besides the consequences due to advice given by a parent to their child, children should always rely on parents advice.
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people
, whether young generation should take
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advice
from their guardian’s or not. A few
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people
believe that guidance from
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parents
is mandatory for
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children
, while others argue. This essay will discuss both sides of argument in detail and put forward evidences why I
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favour
the perspective of asking parental
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help
by
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is the effective method.

Parents play a pivotal role in the physical and mental growth of the growing
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child
. To
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make
it more
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clear
,
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children’s
are not in the position of taking
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decisions
for their future.
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So
, they need
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advice
from their guardians related to their studies and jobs.
For instance
, a study conducted by the school authorities revealed that the
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child
can attain a valuable position in their workplace, if they
are guided
by their
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parents
. In short,
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parent’s
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advice
is necessary for children.

There are
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some
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who
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think
that there is no need of any kind of
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advice
from
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parents
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because
this will suppress the thinking power of the offspring. When a
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child
knows they would
be guided
by their elder ones, then they
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stop
using their brain. This will
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reduce
the capability of taking
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decision
by themselves. A survey conducted by the local hospital,
for example
, declared that the
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child
who are
totally
dependent on their
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parents
for
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decision
has an adverse effect on the function of the brain.
Clearly
,
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some
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decisions
should
be made
by
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children
themselves without taking any
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help
from their parents.

In conclusion
, the number of individuals who
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favours
the proposition say that
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children
need
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advice
from their guardian's in choosing education and future career, whereas others do not vote for it
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because
this
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stops
the
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children’s
brain activity.
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, in my opinion,
besides
the consequences due to
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advice
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given
by a
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parent
to their
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child
,
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children
should always rely on
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parents
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advice
.
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IELTS essay Some people agree that children should ask for parent’s advice. Some disagree. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
310 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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