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Some peope think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent else whereTo what extent do you agree with this view? v.2

Some peope think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent else where v. 2
According to some/many, the money spent in the field of arts by the government is wasting, and they think that this money can be spent in a better way on other things. In my opinion, spending money in both arts and scientific fields will be valuable. As everyone knows that the world is developing day by day, and arts is playing a key role in the development of a nation as well as in the economy of a nation. So many arts fields like architecture, construction, designing etc etc should be given enough importance and the government needs to invest money in these fields. For example, architecture attracts many tourists and it has a major role in economy of a country On the other hand, other field like science and technology should be developed properly to make a nation strong. Science and technology have played a keen role in development of any nation. So it’s the responsibility of a government to spend money in the fields of science and technology, and provide enough oppertunites to the peoples to take advantages from these fields of science and technology. So according to my conclusion spending money by the government on the fields of arts and science are not wasting in any way, and the government needs to improve both of them in a proper ways.
According to
some
/
many
, the
money
spent in the
field
of
arts
by the
government
is wasting, and they
think
that this
money
can
be spent
in a better way on other things. In my opinion, spending
money
in both
arts
and scientific
fields
will be valuable.

As everyone knows that the world is developing day by day, and
arts
is playing a key role in the development of a
nation
as well
as in the economy of a
nation
.
So
many
arts
fields
like architecture, construction, designing
etc etc
should be
given
enough
importance and the
government
needs to invest
money
in these
fields
.
For example
, architecture attracts
many
tourists and it has a major role in economy of a
country


On the other hand
, other
field
like
science
and technology should
be developed
properly
to
make
a
nation
strong.
Science
and technology have played a keen role in development of any
nation
.
So
it’s the responsibility of a
government
to spend
money
in the
fields
of
science
and technology, and provide
enough
oppertunites
to the peoples to take advantages from these
fields
of
science
and technology.

So
according to my conclusion spending
money
by the
government
on the
fields
of
arts
and
science
are not wasting in any way, and the
government
needs to
improve
both of them in a proper
ways
.
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some peope think that the government is wasting money on the arts and that this money could be better spent else where v. 2

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223 words
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