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Some parents think that children should not read books for entertainment. They should read only serious educational books. Give your opinion. v.2

Some parents think that children should not read books for entertainment. They should read only serious educational books. Give your opinion. v. 2
In our contemporary society, Education is the only source which makes anyone well-versed in a particular subject in order to complete chores with efficacy. The know-how of any area can be grasped from reading and understanding about the concept. Though, some parents want their children to focus only on paramount educational books rather than wasting their time on entertainment book. In my perception, Education is ubiquitous, therefore I totally deplored with this notion. This essay will discuss my views further on this topic. The first and the foremost, Reading always gives profound knowledge on any subject, however it depends on the material. Parents must give sometime to their children to read entertainment books instead of imposing them on large educational guides. For instance, Students who focus their whole time in reading educational books founded with scarce means of mental ability in researches. However, Less constraints students who amid themselves with both kinds of sources are found with progression in their carrier with lucrative way. Reading right sources with correct balance of knowledge always boasts momentousness in individual life. Secondly, There is a famous saying " Readers are the leaders" . Those infants who devoted their precious time of childhood in reading books of their choices other than curriculum books are the leaders in their respective profession. The reason behind this success, children learn about various aspects of multifarious topics which increasing their learning power and considering any situation they whipped into their aim without any meddling of the circumstances. To illustrate, students with such activities are more successful and sound in their lives. If students love to read entertainment books tha parent should allow them because those books also gave some knowledge to its readers. To put the afforementioned views of mine in a nutshell, I am on the side to let childrens spend some time on reading fun books because it will enhance their reading power instead of nourishing them to adept only educational knowledge.
In our contemporary society, Education is the
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only
source which
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makes
anyone well-versed in a particular subject in order to complete chores with efficacy. The know-how of any area can
be grasped
from
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reading
and understanding about the concept.
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,
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some
parents want their
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children
to focus
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only
on paramount
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educational
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books
rather
than wasting their
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time
on entertainment
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book
. In my perception, Education is ubiquitous,
therefore
I
totally
deplored with this notion. This essay will discuss my views
further
on this topic.

The
first
and the foremost,
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Reading
always gives profound
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knowledge
on any subject,
however
it depends on the material. Parents
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must
give sometime to their
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children
to read entertainment
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books
instead
of imposing them on large
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educational
guides.
For instance
,
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Students
who focus their whole
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time
in
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reading
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educational
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books
founded with scarce means of mental ability in researches.
However
,
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Less
constraints
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students
who amid themselves with both kinds of sources
are found
with progression in their carrier with lucrative way.
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Reading
right sources with correct balance of
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knowledge
always boasts momentousness in individual life.

Secondly
, There is a
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famous
saying
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; Readers are the
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leaders&quot
;
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.
Those infants who devoted their precious
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time
of childhood in
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reading
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books
of their choices other than curriculum
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books
are the leaders in their respective profession. The reason behind this success,
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children
learn about various aspects of multifarious topics which increasing their learning power and considering any situation they whipped into their aim without any meddling of the circumstances. To illustrate,
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students
with such activities are more successful and sound in their
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lives
. If
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students
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love
to read entertainment
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books
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tha
parent should
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allow
them
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books
also
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some
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knowledge
to its readers.

To put the
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afforementioned
views of mine in a nutshell, I am on the side to
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childrens
spend
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some
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on
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reading
fun
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books
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because
it will enhance their
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reading
power
instead
of nourishing them to adept
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only
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educational
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knowledge
.
12Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
35Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some parents think that children should not read books for entertainment. They should read only serious educational books. Give your opinion. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
326 words
6.0
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