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The student expresses his opinion of the professor's policy for excused absences. Report his opinion and explain the reasons that he gives for having that opinion. v.1

The student expresses his opinion of the professor's policy for excused absences. Report his opinion and explain the reasons that he gives for having that opinion. v. 1
It is very common to see that News stories on TV and newspapers include a plethora of visuals as part of its contents. Few viewers are also of the opinion that the pictures are influential way of communication rather than words. I strongly believe that visual communication is more effective than verbal communication, this essay will describe this in detail. To begin with, If we see any of the news channels on the TV, almost all the news stories will be accompanied by some images or videos related to the event, which it reports for, only a few or even none of the news stories are without any visuals. For example, if there is a news story about a cricket match, first a brief headline will be given by the news anchor followed by a short video clip. Similarly, if there a story about a music concert by some famous celebrity in a newspaper, a celebrity's image will be printed on top of the story write up. I too believe that pictures speak a lot more than words. Yesterday morning, when I picked up my newspaper I saw the smiling face of the Indian cricket captain on the front page of the newspaper, at first glance itself, I guessed that the Indians must have won the World Cup 2020, after reading the whole paragraph of the editorial, I realized my assumption was correct. On the other side, there was a text message floating in my Whatsapp group from an NGO which demanded for the monetary help for the flood victims in my state, but they could not raise a good amount of funds until unless they shared the video clips of effected area. Nowadays, our education system is also promoting the use of videos and pictures in the classroom to teach the children, which make the subject more interesting and easy for them. To conclude, I would like to say that images, videos and other visuals, make the communication more lively, the visuals are strong mean to convey the emotions and hence, being more influential than mere words.
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newspapers
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visuals
as part of its contents. Few viewers are
also
of the opinion that the pictures are
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influential
way of
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communication
rather
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strongly
believe that visual
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communication
is more effective than verbal
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communication
, this essay will
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channels on the TV, almost all the
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stories
will
be accompanied
by
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some
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videos
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event
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stories
are without any
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visuals
.
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story
about a cricket match,
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anchor followed by a short
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clip.
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story
about a music concert by
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famous celebrity
in a
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on top of the
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write up.

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I too
believe that pictures speak a lot more than words. Yesterday morning, when I picked up my
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newspaper
I
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saw
the smiling face of the Indian cricket captain on the front page of the
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newspaper
, at
first
glance itself, I guessed that the Indians
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must
have won the World Cup 2020, after reading the whole paragraph of the editorial, I realized my assumption was correct. On the other side, there was a text message floating in my
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Whatsapp
group from an NGO which demanded for the monetary
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help
for the flood victims in my state,
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but
they could not raise a
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good
amount of funds until unless they shared the
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video
clips of effected area. Nowadays, our education system is
also
promoting the
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use
of
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videos
and pictures in the classroom to teach the children, which
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make
the subject more interesting and easy for them.

To conclude
, I would like to say that images,
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videos
and other
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visuals
,
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make
the
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communication
more lively, the
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visuals
are strong mean to convey the emotions and
hence
, being more influential than mere words.
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7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay The student expresses his opinion of the professor's policy for excused absences. Report his opinion and explain the reasons that he gives for having that opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
348 words
7
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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