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Some parents believe that learning mathematics at school is redundant and should not be taught while others believe it should remain a fundamental subject whether or not it is used later in life. Discuss both views and give your opinion v.5

Some parents believe that learning mathematics at school is redundant and should not be taught while others believe it should remain a fundamental subject whether or not it is used later in life. 5
Many parents think that arithmetic should not be studied in school since it is no longer useful. However, others claim that it should continue to be a basic course, regardless of its use later in the future. In my view, I believe that maths should remain a preliminary subject because it helps both children and adults in the management of money and time. This essay will explain the reasons with relevant examples On the one hand, many parents do not see the need for students to learn mathematics because of the advents of computers. According to these people, these technological gadgets have different complex programmes to help analyse and solve any king of arithmetic problem. Besides this, most companies rely on the use these devices rather than on human expertise of knowledge. For example, 80% of modern companies make use of computers to carry out all their analysis which is one hundred percent accurate. This therefore means that it is no longer necessary to study mathematics as technological appliances now efficiently solve any complex task or assignment. On the other hand, many still consider this course important and claim it should remain a preliminary one, because it teaches individuals, both money and time management and I am in support of this view. Nowadays, people spend money to buy things and it is because of the knowledge gained in this subject that enable them to accurately calculate the amount spent. Also, time management is another advantage of studying mathematics owing to the reason that it helps individual to plan their time effectively. For example, a person who is devoid of the understanding of maths will always have difficulties with keeping to time since they have no prior information about it. In conclusion, eventhough the issue of maths being a basic subject in a school's module is still debated, I am of the opinion that it should continue to be a fundamental course for all children, since it will be of great use in the aspect of managing both money and time in the future.
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think
that arithmetic should not
be studied
in school since it is no longer useful.
However
, others claim that it should continue to be a basic course, regardless of its
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use
later in the future. In my view, I believe that
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maths
should remain a preliminary subject
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because
it
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helps
both children and adults in the management of
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money
and
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time
. This essay will
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explain
the reasons with relevant
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examples


On the one hand,
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many
parents do not
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see
the need for students to learn mathematics
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because
of the advents of computers. According to these
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people
, these technological gadgets have
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different
complex
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programmes
to
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help
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analyse
and solve any king of arithmetic problem.
Besides
this, most
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companies
rely on the
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use
these devices
rather
than on human expertise of knowledge.
For example
, 80% of modern
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companies
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make
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use
of computers to carry out all their analysis which is one hundred percent accurate. This
therefore
means that it is no longer necessary to study mathematics as technological appliances
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now
efficiently
solve any complex task or assignment.

On the other hand
,
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many
still
consider this course
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important
and claim it should remain a preliminary one,
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because
it teaches individuals, both
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money
and
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time
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management and
I am in support of this view. Nowadays,
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people
spend
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money
to
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buy
things and it is
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because
of the knowledge gained in this subject that enable them to
accurately
calculate the amount spent.
Also
,
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time
management is another advantage of studying mathematics owing to the reason that it
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helps
individual to plan their
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time
effectively
.
For example
, a person who is devoid of the understanding of
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maths
will always have difficulties with keeping to
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time
since they have no prior information about it.

In conclusion
,
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eventhough
the issue of
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maths
being a basic subject in a school's module is
still
debated, I am of the opinion that it should continue to be a fundamental course for all children, since it will be of great
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use
in the aspect of managing both
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money
and
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time
in the future.
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IELTS essay Some parents believe that learning mathematics at school is redundant and should not be taught while others believe it should remain a fundamental subject whether or not it is used later in life. 5

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