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Some parents believe that learning mathematics is redundant and should not be taught while others believe that it should remain a foundational subject whether or not it is used in later life. Discuss both sides. v.1

Some parents believe that learning mathematics is redundant and should not be taught while others believe that it should remain a foundational subject whether or not it is used in later life. v. 1
Whether or not to teach mathematics at school is becoming increasingly controversial. While some parents think that learning mathematics is no longer relevant, other parents maintain that it is an important subject. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument in depth. There are growing numbers of parents who believe that mathematics should be removed as a school subject because it has become unimportant. They have reason to believe that mathematics is no longer needed as human skill as it is now typically done by computers. Everything from simple addition and subtraction to complex mathematical equations are now computer operations. These parents have good reasons to believe that mathematics is no longer a relevant subject in schools. In contrast to parents who wish to remove mathematics as a school subject are those who believe it is a fundamental part of learning despite its usefulness. After all, mathematics provides people with a different conceptual way to view the world. For example, knowing how to add, subtract and divide, albeit calculation hat can be done on a phone, are essential daily skills. For these reasons, there are a number of parents who believe mathematics should remain in school subjects. Should mathematic's be removed from a school syllabus? A number of parents think that mathematics is outdated and therefore redundant. Other parents disagree and think that mathematics is still relevant and important. This essay discussed the various reasons why parents hold these points of view and whether mathematics should remain a part of student's school study.
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parents
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mathematics
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maintain that it is an
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important
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subject
. This essay will discuss both sides of the argument in depth.

There are growing numbers of
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parents
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who
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believe
that
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mathematics
should
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school
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because
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reason
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mathematics
is no longer needed as human
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skill
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now
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computer operations. These
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have
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good
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subject
in schools.

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it is a fundamental part of learning despite its usefulness.
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mathematics
provides
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people
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different
conceptual way to view the world.
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add
, subtract and divide, albeit calculation hat can
be done
on a phone, are essential daily
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skills
. For these
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, there are a number of
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parents
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believe
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mathematics
should remain in
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school
subjects.

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be removed
from a
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school
syllabus? A number of
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parents
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think
that
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mathematics
is outdated
and
therefore
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parents
disagree and
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think
that
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mathematics
is
still
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. This essay discussed the various
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reasons
why
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parents
hold these points of view and whether
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mathematics
should remain a part of student's
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school
study.
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IELTS essay Some parents believe that learning mathematics is redundant and should not be taught while others believe that it should remain a foundational subject whether or not it is used in later life. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
254 words
6.5
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