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Some of today’s schools insist that all students have their own laptop computer in class to assist in their education. Do you feel that this would be an advantage to students’ education, or would it be an unnecessary complication? v.2

Some of today’s schools insist that all students have their own laptop computer in class to assist in their education. Do you feel that this would be an advantage to students’ education, or would it be an unnecessary complication? v. 2
Avoiding using personal computers to students is to their life skill development what staying outside the ground is to learning a football lesson. Applying laptop computers for educational purposes has been argued to be unnecessary in classroom time. In the following essay both viewpoints will be discussed. On the one hand, allowing students to utilize their laptops in classrooms is erroneously considered to be unnecessary. This debatable belief claims that these electronic devices are a distraction from perceiving lectures. By way of illustration, one consequence is that pupils might misuse these facilities and prefer to play computer games or even surf the Internet throughout the class time. Set against this is the viewpoint that denying access to personal computers means that students are deprived of high-tech learning methods at the expense of not learning how to utilize technology, only for fear of its irreparable harm, which is exceedingly overprotective. Never can it be denied that the mastery of life skills is too serious to be treated like that. Another way of looking at personal laptop access in schools is that electronic devices can enable students to develop their potential. The salient point to note here is that computers can be used for research purposes, particularly indispensable for self-discipline development and prioritization while permitting them to utilize them for educational aims. The contrasting view is that depending on technology may lead to students’ laziness in producing new ideas; however, learning critical-thinking can help prevent this. It is accepted that having access to the personal laptop computers in classrooms can initially require great scrutiny, but in the long run, when the confidence of being truly able to deal with such devices properly is instilled in a student, it is well worth it. To summarize, unnecessary and destructive as personal laptops in classrooms might be, such devices are undoubtedly excellent tools to help students learn how to set and maintain boundaries. If avoiding using personal computers to students in school classes is as futile as staying outside the ground while learning a football lesson, then we need to beware of how a small concern can cost a large shadow.
Avoiding using
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personal
computers to
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students
is to their life
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
development what staying outside the ground is to
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learning
a football lesson. Applying
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laptop
computers for educational purposes has
been argued
to be unnecessary in classroom time. In the following essay both viewpoints will
be discussed
.

On the one hand, allowing
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
to utilize their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptops
in classrooms is
erroneously
considered to be unnecessary. This debatable belief claims that these electronic
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
devices
are a distraction from perceiving lectures. By way of illustration, one consequence is that pupils might misuse these facilities and prefer to play computer games or even surf the Internet throughout the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
time. Set against this is the viewpoint that denying access to
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personal
computers means that
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students
are deprived
of high-tech
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learning
methods at the expense of not
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learning
how to utilize technology,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
for fear of its irreparable harm, which is
exceedingly
overprotective. Never can it
be denied
that the mastery of life
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
is too serious to
be treated
like that.

Another way of looking at
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personal
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laptop
access in schools is that electronic
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devices
can enable
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students
to develop their potential. The salient point to note
Did you mean "here are that computers"?
here is that computers
can be
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used
for research purposes,
particularly
indispensable for self-discipline development and prioritization while permitting them to utilize them for educational aims. The contrasting view is that depending on technology may lead to
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students’
laziness in producing new
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ideas
;
however
,
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learning
critical-thinking can
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help
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prevent
this. It is
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accepted
that having access to the
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personal
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laptop
computers in classrooms can
initially
require great scrutiny,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
but
in the long run, when the confidence of being
truly
able to deal with such
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devices
properly
is instilled
in a
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student
, it is well worth it.

To summarize
, unnecessary and destructive as
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
personal
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptops
in classrooms might be, such
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
devices
are
undoubtedly
excellent tools to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
learn how to set and maintain boundaries. If avoiding using
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
personal
computers to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
in school classes is as futile as staying outside the ground while
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
learning
a football lesson, then we need to beware of how a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
concern can cost a large shadow.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS essay Some of today’s schools insist that all students have their own laptop computer in class to assist in their education. Do you feel that this would be an advantage to students’ education, or would it be an unnecessary complication? v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
356 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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