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Some of the schools insist that all students have their own laptop in class to assist in their education Do you feel that this would be an advantage to students education or would it be an unnecessary complication v.2

Some of the schools insist that all students have their own laptop in class to assist in their education Do you feel that this would be an advantage to students education or would it be an unnecessary complication v. 2
In today' s technological era, the use of computer has been widely spread among all the industries. In fact, the routine use of the personal computer at school is the emerging trend today. As a result, some of the schools insist that all students should carry their own laptop in the class to assist in their education. However, my inclination discords with the thought which can be elaborated as follows. To commence with, studying on the laptop has many detrimental effects on the growth of the student. The typing and spelling correction support of the laptop will affect the writing skill as well as the vocabulary grasping of the student. Moreover, the laptop with the support of internet can remove the stress of searching information from the student-life. They would find lots of information at one click which will restrict them to utilize their mind in questing other sources of information like library, journals, research centres, government documents and so on. Last but not the least, using the laptop will not assure the use of it in the study only. There is numerous other use of laptop which can distract the student from the study. On the flip side, the laptop can benefit in many ways. firstly, the use of the personal laptop can alleviate the use of paper from the student life that will consider it to be environment-friendly. Also, the student can save all his work on the laptop and can use it at any point of time can prove it a user-friendly gadget. Finally, use of the laptop in routine can make the student conversant in the skill of using the laptop which is the most demanding skill of corporate world. It depicts that the student will get prepared fo their future during their education life. All in all, looking into the above arguments, the benefits of using the laptop are quite considerable for occasional use in place of routine for the students. Thus, I strongly believe that students should not be forced to get their own laptop at school in place of the conventional method of study.
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of the personal computer at school is the emerging trend
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.
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some of the
schools insist that all
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students
should carry their
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own
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laptop
in the
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class
to assist in their education.
However
, my inclination discords with the
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thought
which can
be elaborated
as follows.

To commence with, studying on the
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laptop
has
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many
detrimental effects on the growth of the
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student
. The typing and spelling correction support of the
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laptop
will affect the writing
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skill
as well
as the vocabulary grasping of the
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student
.
Moreover
, the
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laptop
with the support of internet can remove the
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stress
of searching information from the student-life. They would find lots of information at one click which will restrict them to utilize their mind in questing other sources of information like library, journals, research
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centres
,
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documents and
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on. Last
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not the least, using the
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laptop
will not assure the
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use
of it in the study
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only
. There is numerous other
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of
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laptop
which can distract the
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student
from the study.

On the flip side, the
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laptop
can benefit in
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many
ways.
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firstly
, the
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use
of the personal
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laptop
can alleviate the
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use
of paper from the
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student
life that will consider it to be environment-friendly.
Also
, the
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student
can save all his work on the
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laptop
and can
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use
it at any point of time can prove it a user-friendly gadget.
Finally
,
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use
of the
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in routine can
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make
the
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student
conversant in the
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skill
of using the
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laptop
which is the most demanding
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skill
of corporate world. It depicts that the
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student
will
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get
prepared
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fo
their future during their education life.

All in all, looking into the above arguments, the benefits of using the
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laptop
are quite considerable for occasional
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use
in place of routine for the
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students
.
Thus
, I
strongly
believe that
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students
should not
be forced
to
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get
their
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own
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
at school in place of the conventional method of study.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
23Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some of the schools insist that all students have their own laptop in class to assist in their education Do you feel that this would be an advantage to students education or would it be an unnecessary complication v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
351 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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