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Some of the schools insist that all students have their own laptop in class to assist in their education Do you feel that this would be an advantage to students education or would it be an unnecessary complication v.1

Some of the schools insist that all students have their own laptop in class to assist in their education Do you feel that this would be an advantage to students education or would it be an unnecessary complication v. 1
While most employees spent their entire life working for the same company, many argue that it is better to change their job whenever they get a greater chance in other organizations. I personally believe that there will be a controversial effect if we will work for different companies in our whole working life. On the one hand, some workers want to change their job whenever they get a better opportunity in other organizations. They want to take a risk to get better salary and working experience. Most employees always seek to get a satisfied job by working in different companies. They can meet numerous people and have different working conditions if they will work for various organizations. For example, I want to work in a local company and then I will change to a foreign company to get a better salary and life experience. On the other hand, it is quite reasonable why people never leave from their initial companies. They can get a promotion if they will work longer in the same organization. Besides, people don’t want to quit from a place where they get used to the working conditions. They don’t want to start from the beginning again and I think it is the main reason why most employees always hesitate to change their jobs. For instance, my parents never think to resign from their present companies because they don’t want to deal with different situations in other companies. Moreover, some believe that they should have loyalty to their companies if they want to establish more successful life. To sum up, it is too risky to change our job frequently because there is no guarantee that we will have a better and successful life in other companies.
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working
for the same
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company
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argue that it is
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whenever they
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organizations
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believe that there will be a controversial effect if we will
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companies
in our whole
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life.

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opportunity in
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organizations
. They
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risk
to
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get
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salary and
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experience. Most employees always seek to
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get
a satisfied
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job
by
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companies
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meet
numerous
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people
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different
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working
conditions if they will
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work
for various
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organizations
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want
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salary and life experience.

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people
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from their initial
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companies
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get
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work
longer in the same
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organization
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jobs
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, my parents never
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companies
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believe that they should have loyalty to their
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if they
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want
to establish more successful life.

To sum up, it is too risky to
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change
our
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frequently
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because
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better
and successful life in
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7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes
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IELTS essay Some of the schools insist that all students have their own laptop in class to assist in their education Do you feel that this would be an advantage to students education or would it be an unnecessary complication v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
289 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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