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Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. To what extent do you agree with this view? v.4

Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. v. 4
In Modern society, advertisements play a key role in promoting the company's products. With that being said, I completely agree that some adverts are following unacceptable and unnecessary ways to advertise their items with misleading commercials and grabbing the attention of youngsters which leaves them disappointed. To start with, adverts are using customer's confidential details without their consent. When buying products, customers are requested to fill the details that include their phone numbers and email Ids. This data is being used for promoting their products by sending messages and emails to people repeatedly. This is unacceptable and it will also lead to missing some important messages as customer's inboxes are filled with unnecessary advertisements. For instance, one of my colleagues has accidentally deleted an email with an important meeting schedule when deleting these promotional emails. Another unacceptable form of advertising is showing misleading commercials. There are so many commercials for fairness creams that make false promises to the customers and when they use the product, people are disappointed with the results. Although, these commercials are intended to all age groups their impact is on youngsters. For example, Fair and Handsome commercial uses a brown girl which turns into a white girl after applying the cream and people are presuming that anyone could get fair skin using their product which is quite misleading. In conclusion, I believe that some companies use inappropriate and unethical ways to advertise their products and this results in customer dissatisfaction and a bad impact on the younger generation.
In Modern society, advertisements play a key role in promoting the
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company
's
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products
. With that
being said
, I completely
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agree
that
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adverts are following unacceptable and unnecessary ways to advertise their items with misleading commercials and grabbing the attention of youngsters which
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leaves
them disappointed.

To
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start
with, adverts are using customer's confidential
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details
without their consent. When buying
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products
, customers
are requested
to fill the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
details
that include their phone numbers and email Ids. This data is being
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used
for promoting their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
by sending messages and emails to
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people
repeatedly
. This is unacceptable and it will
also
lead to missing
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some
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important
messages as customer's inboxes
are filled
with unnecessary advertisements.
For instance
, one of my colleagues has
accidentally
deleted an email with an
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important
meeting schedule when deleting these promotional emails.

Another unacceptable form of advertising is showing misleading commercials. There are
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so
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many
commercials for fairness creams that
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make
false promises to the customers and when they
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use
the
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product
,
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people
are disappointed
with the results.
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Although
, these commercials
are intended
to all age groups their impact is on youngsters.
For example
,
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Fair
and Handsome
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commercial
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uses
a brown girl which turns into a white girl after applying the cream and
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people
are presuming that anyone could
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get
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fair
skin using their
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product
which is quite misleading.

In conclusion
, I believe that
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some
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companies
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use
inappropriate and unethical ways to advertise their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
products
and this results in customer dissatisfaction and a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bad
impact on the younger generation.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Mistakes

IELTS essay Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. v. 4

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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