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Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. To what extent do you agree with this view? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge. v.7

Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. v. 7
Advertisements are the main form of marketing techniques used by the brands to attract the people's attention in the current generation. Many believe, the campaigns nowadays are are law-abiding or not in an acceptable way. I partially agree with this opinion. In this first part of the essay, I am going to explain about the unethical way advertisements are being designed with a relevant example, In the second part, I am going to explain about the best part of advertising. A lot of companies in this era are seriously concerned about their competition and directly or indirectly expressing their views to the society through advertisements by implementing many negative strategies. These activities are legally not valid and should be avoided for a better society. For example, A series of advertisements released in Pakistan in 2015 by the Oriental hotels are clearly showcasing the safety issues if visited to any other Hotel showing an example of Terrorist activities happened in the Taj hotels. Pakistan law has banned a few advertisements in 2016 and warned the Oriental group about the impacts it can bring on people's psychology if targeting a specific organization. On the other side, Few companies are bringing their campaigns to help society to understand the situations and overcome them in a possible way. For instance, A power company in Finland launched a series of ads in 2106 to show the electricity issues in the African continent, which makes many countries realize and donated money as much as they can to solve the issues up to some extent. In conclusion, Many companies launching advertisements by following illegal practices. This should be avoided and follow the best methods which should at least not create any disturbances in society.
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Advertisements
are the main form of marketing techniques
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used
by the brands to attract the
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people
's attention in the
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current
generation.
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Many
believe, the campaigns nowadays
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are are
law-abiding or not
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in an acceptable way
. I
partially
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agree
with this opinion. In this
first
part of the essay, I am going to
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explain
about the unethical way
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advertisements
are
being designed
with a relevant example, In the second part, I am going to
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explain
about the best part of advertising.

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A lot of
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companies
in this era are
seriously
concerned about their competition and
directly
or
indirectly
expressing their views to the
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society
through
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advertisements
by implementing
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many
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negative
strategies.

These activities are
legally
not valid and should
be avoided
for a better
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society
.
For example
, A series of
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advertisements
released in Pakistan in 2015 by the Oriental hotels are
clearly
showcasing the safety issues if visited to any other Hotel showing an example of Terrorist activities happened in the
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Taj
hotels. Pakistan law has banned a few
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advertisements
in 2016 and warned the Oriental group about the impacts it can bring on
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people
's psychology if targeting a specific organization.

On the other side, Few
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companies
are bringing their campaigns to
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help
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society
to understand the situations and overcome them
Consider replacing "in a possible way" with the adverb for "possible"; e.g., "in a hasty manner" with "hastily".
in a possible way
.
For instance
, A power
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company
in Finland launched a series of ads in 2106 to
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show
the electricity issues in the African continent, which
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makes
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many
countries realize and donated money as much as they can to solve the issues up to
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some
extent.

In conclusion
,
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Many
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companies
launching
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advertisements
by following illegal practices. This should
be avoided
and follow the best methods which should at least not create any disturbances in
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society
.
5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
14Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some of the methods used in advertising are unethical and unacceptable in today’s society. v. 7

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
287 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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