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Some increasing price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? ? What other measures do you think might be effective? v.1

Some increasing price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. ? What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 1
Contamination through various vehicles is a serious problem in present time. Some people believe that this problem can be solved by rising rate of petrol and also other fuels. I mostly agree with this aspect and discuss briefly in this essay with essay with the conclusion at the end. To embark on, there are some reasons to decrease the traffic problems by growing price of petrol and other fuels. First of all, the main reason of pollution is the smoke from the vehicles which is because of different fuels. When people use less vehicle because of inflation in fuels than as the result of that the pollution will be reduced. In addition, people should find another way for short transportation purpose like cycling which can be beneficial for their physical health and also for environment. As an instance, as pr the survey conducted in China, most of the people go to workplace on their foot and by bicycle which make them healthier than others. However, some negative effect of this issue is to those people who have long routes and no any other option than cars and motorcycles will have to face this problem. Furthermore, there are many other options for travelling which are helpful for humans as well as nature. Firstly, people can use conventional resources such as solar energy, electric energy which are less responsible for pollution than petrol and other fuels. Solar vehicles have been invented and those should be used by more people because their advantages outweigh their disadvantages. Solar power is easily available, economic and not harmful for nature. Secondly, electric energy is also another way towards cheap and healthy transportation. As an example, in Dubai most people use solar cars which helped them financially and converted the city into cleanest city of the world. To conclude, I completely agree with that the traffic issues and pollution can be reduced with the help of using less petrol and diesel vehicles rather than use repetitive resources to built pollution free environment.
Contamination through various
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vehicles
is a serious problem in present time.
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Some
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people
believe that this problem can
be solved
by rising rate of
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petrol
and
also
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other
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fuels
. I
mostly
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agree
with this aspect and discuss
briefly
in this
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essay with essay with
the conclusion at the
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end
.

To embark on, there are
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some
reasons to decrease the traffic problems by growing price of
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petrol
and
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other
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fuels
.
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First of all
, the main reason of
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pollution
is the smoke from the
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vehicles
which is
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because
of
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different
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fuels
. When
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people
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use
less
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vehicle
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because
of inflation in
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fuels
than as the result of that the
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pollution
will be
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reduced
.
In addition
,
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people
should find another way for short transportation purpose like cycling which can be beneficial for their physical health and
also
for environment. As an instance, as pr the survey conducted in China, most of the
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people
go to workplace on their foot and by bicycle which
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make
them healthier than others.
However
,
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some
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negative
effect of this issue is to those
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people
who have long routes and
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no
any
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other
option than cars and motorcycles will
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have to
face this problem.

Furthermore
, there are
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many
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other
options for travelling which are helpful for humans
as well
as nature.
Firstly
,
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people
can
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use
conventional resources such as
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solar
energy, electric energy which are less responsible for
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pollution
than
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petrol
and
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other
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fuels
.
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Solar
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vehicles
have
been invented
and those should be
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used
by more
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people
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because
their advantages outweigh their disadvantages.
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Solar
power is
easily
available, economic and not harmful for nature.
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, electric energy is
also
another way towards
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cheap
and healthy transportation. As an example, in Dubai most
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people
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use
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solar
cars which
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helped
them
financially
and converted the city into
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cleanest
city of the world.

To conclude
, I completely
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agree
with that the traffic issues and
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pollution
can be
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reduced
with the
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help
of using less
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petrol
and diesel
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vehicles
rather
than
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use
repetitive resources to built
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pollution
free environment.
13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
36Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
4Mistakes

IELTS essay Some increasing price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. ? What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
335 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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