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Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree? What other measures do you think might be effective? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.28

Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 28
How can we tackle the issue of air pollution and traffic congestion? It is suggested that the most effective way to solve this problem is to inflate the cost of petroleum. In my opinion, I completely disagree with this idea as other methods Such as encouraging the use of public transportation and growth of trees will solve this problem better. First of all, increasing the cost of fuel will only worsen the situation, because a large percentage of car owners are in the middle and upper class of the community and as a result of this they will be able to afford the fuel. This will lead to more air pollution and traffic problems. On the other hand, a more efficient way to tackle this issue is by encouraging more travellers to utilize the public transportation system. People feel reluctant to use this system because they are not functioning properly and the crime rate around these stations are high. If people start using the subways, it will reduce the amount of vehicle on the road thus reducing traffic and air pollution. For example, China has the lowest record of air pollution and the least traffic issues in the world since they opened twenty train stations ten years ago. This has solved their problem ever since. Furthermore, planting of trees will also help with the air pollution. Trees are the earth's lungs because they absorb the bad carbon dioxide gas that is being produced by vehicles, but the atmosphere and in turn gives us humidified and pure oxygen. Therefore, investment of time and resources to grow these trees will be effective in tackling air pollution. To illustrate this point, the Caribbean countries have the lowest record of air pollution, according to the recent data released by the World Environmental Body. They identified that the primary reason for this was that they had a lot of trees in their environment. To conclude, although at a glance, increasing the price of petroleum might seem as the solution, it will only empower the rich and deteriorate the situation. I believe that allowing people to have access to public transportation and growing of more trees are better ways to battle the traffic and pollution issues.
How can we tackle the
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air
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pollution
and
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traffic
congestion? It
is suggested
that the most effective way to solve this problem is to inflate the cost of petroleum. In my opinion, I completely disagree with this
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idea
as other methods Such as encouraging the
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use
of public transportation and growth of
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trees
will solve this problem better.

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First of all
, increasing the cost of fuel will
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only
worsen the situation,
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because
a large percentage of car owners are in the middle and upper
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class
of the community and
as a result
of this they will be able to afford the fuel. This will lead to more
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air
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pollution
and
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traffic
problems.

On the other hand
, a more efficient way to tackle this
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issue
is by encouraging more
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travellers
to utilize the public transportation system.
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People
feel reluctant to
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use
this system
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because
they are not functioning
properly
and the crime rate around these stations are high. If
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people
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start
using the subways, it will
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reduce
the amount of vehicle on the road
thus
reducing
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traffic
and
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air
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pollution
.
For example
, China has the lowest record of
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air
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pollution
and the least
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traffic
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issues
in the world since they opened twenty train stations ten years ago. This has solved their problem ever since.

Furthermore
, planting of
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trees
will
also
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help
with the
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air
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pollution
.
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Trees
are the earth's lungs
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because
they absorb the
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bad
carbon dioxide gas
that is
being produced
by vehicles,
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but
the atmosphere and in turn gives us humidified and pure oxygen.
Therefore
, investment of time and resources to grow these
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trees
will be effective in tackling
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air
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pollution
. To illustrate this point, the Caribbean countries have the lowest record of
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air
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pollution
, according to the recent data released by the World Environmental Body. They identified that the primary reason for this was that they had
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a lot of
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trees
in their environment.

To conclude
, although at a glance, increasing the price of petroleum might seem as the solution, it will
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only
empower the rich and deteriorate the situation. I believe that allowing
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people
to have access to public transportation and growing of more
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trees
are better ways to battle the
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traffic
and
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pollution
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issues
.
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IELTS essay Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems. What other measures do you think might be effective? v. 28

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
370 words
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Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
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  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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