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Some people think that a person improves their intellectual skills more when doing group activities. To what extent do you agree? v.5

Some people think that a person improves their intellectual skills more when doing group activities. v. 5
Group work is a form of association of members. It is a cooperative learning that enhances the total output of activity rather than working as an individual. Many believe that work in team persons develop their individually mental aptitude more. However, others think that intellectual skills are not only improved by doing group activities but also exceeds by working solitary. I think that working in a group can be increased the mental capability of human beings by thinking and decision-making abilities. The advantage of working in a group is that people can enhance their thinking abilities. This is because the study-group enables an individual to obtain information and allow their feedback to refine their understanding of concepts. Consequently, peers also learn new information from other members. For example, many researchers have studied the importance of group-level cognition. Admittedly, they found that if a person participated in a group activity they were more knowledgeable than others who did not join in that group. So, group study increases an individual's intellectual abilities. Moreover, participation in the team game, which also enhances a person's ability to make decisions. So, a person needs mental calculation for victory during taking part in sport. For instance, in a sporting context, players must predict and anticipate possible actions within tight time constraints. Such predictive power improves a player's brainpower. However, some opponents deem that many other solitary activities enhance mental skills. For example, a person solve some mathematical puzzles. For individuals enhance their thinking abilities as well as concentration. In conclusion, despite working individually, there are far more benefits of working in a group to develop intellectual skills. In the future, we will certainly see schools take bigger steps to ensure that more group-level cognition occurs in the classroom.
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enhances
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activity
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working
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aptitude more.
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solitary. I
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can
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capability of human beings by thinking and decision-making abilities.

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in a
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is that
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the study-group enables an individual to obtain information and
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allow
their feedback to refine their understanding of concepts.
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, peers
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learn new information from
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other
members.
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,
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researchers have studied the importance of group-level cognition.
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, they found that if a
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person
participated in a
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group
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activity
they were more knowledgeable than others who did not
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join
in that
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group
.
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,
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study increases an individual's intellectual abilities.

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, participation in the team game, which
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enhances
a person's ability to
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decisions.
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, a
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person
needs
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mental
calculation for victory during taking part in sport.
For instance
, in a sporting context, players
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must
predict and anticipate possible actions within tight time constraints. Such predictive power
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improves
a player's brainpower.

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,
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opponents deem that
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solitary
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skills
.
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, a
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person
solve
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some
mathematical puzzles. For individuals
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enhance
their thinking abilities
as well
as concentration.

In conclusion
, despite
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working
individually
, there are far more benefits of
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working
in a
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group
to develop intellectual
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skills
. In the future, we will
certainly
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schools take bigger steps to ensure that more group-level cognition occurs in the classroom.
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33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that a person improves their intellectual skills more when doing group activities. v. 5

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
292 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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