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Some high schools require all students to wear school uniforms. Other high schools permit students to decide what to wear to school. Which of these two school policies do you think is better? v.7

Some high schools require all students to wear school uniforms. Other high schools permit students to decide what to wear to school. Which of these two school policies do you think is better? v. 7
I think that the issue whether all students are required to wear school uniform is the one that is open for debate. Some people think that all students must wear the school uniform. However, others think that students should decide what to wear to school themselves or by their parents. Personally, I believe that students should wear what they like. For several reasons, which I will mention bellow, I think that school uniforms should not be required to wear at high school level. First of all, if students do not have school uniforms they can wear what they like to wear. Personally, I like to wear clothes which are comfortable. Also, I am a female and I like to wear jeans and shorts, and as far as I know girls must wear skirts as part of their school uniform. I think many female students will agree with me that jeans are much more comfortable than skirts. Second of all, I believe that school uniforms must not cause any discomfort. For example, some international students will find it unacceptable to wear some of the uniform's parts. I am from Russia and when I was a student of the elementary school I was required to wear the school uniform that included a dark blue skirt and a white or light blue shirt. I did not like it very much because I did not like the fact that all students were dressed in the same colour. We dressed the same way and we were permitted to wear any adornments. Personally, I did not like the fact that girls always had to wear skirts and it was not convenient, especially in cold weather. In short, I think that students should wear to school what they want. Otherwise, if a high school requires students to wear school uniforms, I think that uniforms must be comfortable for all students.
I
think
that the issue whether all
students
are required
to
wear
school
uniform
is the one
that is
open for debate.
Some
people
think
that all
students
must
wear
the
school
uniform
.
However
, others
think
that
students
should decide what to
wear
to
school
themselves or by their parents.
Personally
, I believe that
students
should
wear
what they like. For several reasons, which I will mention bellow, I
think
that
school
uniforms
should not
be required
to
wear
at high
school
level.

First of all
, if
students
do not have
school
uniforms
they can
wear
what they like to
wear
.
Personally
, I like to
wear
clothes which are comfortable.
Also
, I am a female and I like to
wear
jeans and shorts, and as far as I know girls
must
wear
skirts as part of their
school
uniform
. I
think
many
female
students
will
agree
with me that jeans are much more comfortable than skirts.

Second of all, I believe that
school
uniforms
must
not cause any discomfort.
For example
,
some
international
students
will find it unacceptable to
wear
some
of the uniform's parts. I am from Russia and when I was a
student
of the elementary
school
I
was required
to
wear
the
school
uniform
that included a dark blue skirt and a white or light blue shirt. I did not like it
very
much
because
I did not like the fact that all
students
were dressed
in the same
colour
. We dressed the same
way and
we
were permitted
to
wear
any adornments.
Personally
, I did not like the fact that girls always had to
wear
skirts and it was not convenient,
especially
in
cold
weather.

In short, I
think
that
students
should
wear
to
school
what they want.
Otherwise
, if a high
school
requires
students
to
wear
school
uniforms
, I
think
that
uniforms
must
be comfortable for all
students
.
7Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
57Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay Some high schools require all students to wear school uniforms. Other high schools permit students to decide what to wear to school. Which of these two school policies do you think is better? v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
313 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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