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Some high school required all student to wear school uniform other higher school permit student to decide what to wear to school. v.3

Some high school required all student to wear school uniform other higher school permit student to decide what to wear to school. v. 3
It is compulsory for other secondary schools for children to put on school uniform, while some schools allow pupils to choose their own dresscode. This essay will discuss the benefits for pupils to put on school uniform, as well as, the liberty for children to make their own decision. Uniforms close door for social classes among high school students. Some students afford to buy quality and designer clothing which other students do not afford. This will result in descrimination among students especially those of low socio- economic status. Child descrimination increase school dropouts and lowers pupils grades, as they will loose confidence and feel out of place by seen their peers well dressed in expensive outfits. Furthermore, uniformity brings distinguition among students from different schools. When a child encounters a problem or got involved in a tragedy, it is easy to identify the student and inform the respective school. Time will not be consumed roaming around trying to locate the child' s parents or guardian, which can be done through the school, as the pupil would be identified by the school uniform. However, giving liberty for high school pupils to choose what they want to put on is also a sign of promoting children' s rights to choose. Apart from positives brought about by uniform, it is also human to choose what they want. Other alternatives, such as, school identification cards can be used for identification. In conclusion, the benefits of children putting on uniform outweighs the advantages of pupils wearing the dresscode of their choice. It is easier to identify children in uniform and render help quicker. It also promote good relationship among students and do away with social classes.
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to put on
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school
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uniform
, while
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some
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schools
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allow
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pupils
to
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choose
their
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own
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dresscode
. This essay will discuss the benefits for
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pupils
to put on
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school
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uniform
,
as well
as, the liberty for
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children
to
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make
their
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own
decision.

Uniforms close door for social classes among high
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school
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students
.
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Some
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students
afford to
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buy
quality and designer clothing which other
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students
do not afford. This will result in
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descrimination
among
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students
especially
those of low
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socio
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descrimination
increase
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school
dropouts and lowers
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pupils
grades, as they will
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loose
confidence and feel out of place by
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seen
their peers
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well dressed
in expensive outfits.

Furthermore
, uniformity brings
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distinguition
among
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students
from
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different
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schools
. When a child encounters a problem or
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got
involved in a tragedy, it is easy to identify the
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student
and inform the respective
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school
. Time will not
be consumed
roaming around trying to locate the
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child&
#039; s parents or guardian, which can
be done
through the
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school
, as the
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pupil
would
be identified
by the
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school
uniform.

However
, giving liberty for high
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school
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pupils
to
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choose
what they want to put on is
also
a
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sign
of promoting
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children&
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choose
. Apart from positives brought about by
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uniform
, it is
also
human to
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choose
what they want. Other alternatives, such as,
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school
identification cards can be
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used
for identification.

In conclusion
, the benefits of
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children
putting on
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uniform
outweighs the advantages of
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pupils
wearing the
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dresscode
of their choice. It is easier to identify
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children
in
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uniform
and render
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help
quicker. It
also
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promote
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good
relationship among
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students
and do away with social classes.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
39Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11Mistakes

IELTS essay Some high school required all student to wear school uniform other higher school permit student to decide what to wear to school. v. 3

Essay
  American English
5 paragraphs
281 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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