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Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do agree or disagree? v.1

Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do agree or disagree? v. 1
The ban of smoking in public places is happening in many countries. There are advantages and disadvantages of the ban of smoking in public. Therefore, this essay will discuss both positives and negatives. Moreover, this essay will explain why this essay tends to agree with the ban on smoking in public. Firstly, the smoking in public areas makes a pollution problem badly. Many people already know about the bad effects on the smoking and they don’t want to smell especially pregnant women. Each year many people die due to the lung cancer. Not only the smoking has effects on a smoker, but it also affects people near a smoker. Thus, many governments have amended the law about the smoking in public. For example, in Japan, the government don’t allow citizens to exhaust in public, but they have special areas for smoking. As a result, Japanese people have a good habit to smoke in smoking areas. However, there are some people that against to exhaust in smoking areas. Those people refer to the human right, but they don’t care about public people. Some people, who are addicted to smoking, can not stay longer without smoking. They feel that the ban on smoking has bad effects on their routine life. In conclusion, this study agrees that governments should restriction the smoking in public areas because there are many drawbacks of the smoking. If governments look to a population of people, who are smoking, and people, who are not smoking, they will see that there are fewer smokers than people who don’t smoke. As a result, That’s the right thing that some governments ban the smoking in public spaces.
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have amended the law about the
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For example
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citizens to exhaust in
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drawbacks of the
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13Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
55Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some governments have banned smoking in all public places. Do agree or disagree? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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