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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v.5

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 5
It is advisable that children should be introduced to a foreign language at elementary school than secondary. The principal advantage of teaching a foreign language at primary school is that it ensures a better future for children while the main disadvantage is the pressure on the premature minds. This essay will argue why the benefits of learning a foreign language at an early age dominate the drawbacks. To begin with, children who approach more than one language since elementary school have a tendency to get better jobs and more opportunities than those who do not. It is evident that businesses need people who possess foreign languages to improve communication. In addition, children have the ability to pick up language much faster than adults because they have a receptive mind and do not afraid to make mistaks. A research carried out by students of Harvard University claims that children at the age of 4-8 can learn a new language better than 80% of adults. Therefore, accessing to a foreign language at a young age will provide children with competitive advantages in life. However, learning an entirely new language can confuse children as well as put pressure on them. Beside maths, literature and many other subjects which have been already stressful enough, learning a second language can be tricky and time-consuming. This type of burden can withhold their mental and personal growth. Despite this, a simple solution could be established by adjusting the schedule. In conclusion, although there could be negative effects of foreign language acquisition in primary education, the perks of it absolutely outnumber downsides since it plays an important role in the future development of children.
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at elementary school than secondary. The principal advantage of teaching a
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foreign
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language
at primary school is that it ensures a better future for
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children
while the main disadvantage is the pressure on the premature minds. This essay will argue why the benefits of learning a
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foreign
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language
at an early age dominate the drawbacks.

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with,
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children
who approach more than one
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language
since elementary school have a tendency to
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better jobs and more opportunities than those who do not. It is evident that businesses need
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people
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,
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children
have the ability to pick up
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much faster than adults
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carried out by students of Harvard University claims that
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children
at the age of 4-8 can learn a new
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language
better than 80% of adults.
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foreign
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at a young age will provide
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children
with competitive advantages in life.

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can confuse
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children
as well
as put pressure on them. Beside
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, literature and
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other subjects which have been already stressful
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, learning a second
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language
can be tricky and time-consuming. This type of burden can withhold their mental and personal growth. Despite this, a simple solution could
be established
by adjusting the schedule.

In conclusion
, although there could be
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negative
effects of
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acquisition in primary education, the perks of it
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outnumber downsides since it plays an
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IELTS essay Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 5

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
276 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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