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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v.36

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 36
Nowadays, the question of whether student from 6 to 10 years should be studied a second language or not has been receiving a great deal of public attention. While foreign languages play an integral part in decent education system, studying other languages at primary school bring more advantages than drawbacks. On the one hand, there is a wide range of disadvantages for this assumption. The first drawback is that the period of 6 to 10 years, which is time student continue fulfilling their mother language, so if they have to live in a bilingual environment, pupils are able to suffer from language disorders and cannot express their notion clearly. In fact, a huge of children over the world dealt with problems in permanence, and it has a harmful impact on children’s cognitive development. Furthermore, primary school teachers, especially in rural areas, normally cover all subjects, so expected learning outcome not guaranteed well. In addition, the requirement of qualification is not suitable. In Vietnam, for example, people only have B1 certificate can apply to become a language teacher. This may lead to short of knowledge or experience to teach children and make serious consequences as mispronunciation and misunderstand nature, which is extremely hard to modify at the mature age. On the other hand, the advantages will outweigh the disadvantages mentioned above. Firstly, at early stages of life, children are likely to study other languages as their instinct. Pupils, therefore, can imitate accents and rhythm without the berries or nervous. The sensitive ears help them pick up and duplicate tricky sounds that adult or adolescents often stumble over. Secondly, by learning foreign languages children can have countless opportunities to explore other culture and enrich their knowledge or even that is a positive factor help increase their intelligence quotient. To cite an example, according to studies published in Nature, pupils learning second languages early are able to tackle complex situations faster and better than peers who study languages latter. In conclusion, the benefits of studying a foreign language at primary school more significant than the disadvantages.
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other
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languages
at primary school bring more advantages than drawbacks.

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in a bilingual environment, pupils are able to suffer from
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children
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children’s
cognitive development.
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normally
cover all subjects,
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children
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as their instinct. Pupils,
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early are able to tackle complex situations faster and better than peers who study
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, the benefits of studying a foreign
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IELTS essay Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 36

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
343 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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