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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. DO you agree or disagree? v.35

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. v. 35
It is irrefutable that languages play a vital role in the development of a child. Therefore, some people think that a foreign language can be introduced in the academic curriculum at the primary level as opposed to secondary. I, completely agree with the statement, and this essay will elaborate on my reasons with relevant examples to support my viewpoint. To begin with, starting a foreign language at primary school can lay a strong foundation. In other words, more years of learning and practice can result in better fluency and vocabulary. For example, in Western countries, children speak and write in English more comfortably, whilst children in Asian countries. This is because, English is taught in western countries, right from childhood, even when the children have not started to speak. Undoubtedly, practice and time can make a man perfect in any language. Besides, adding a foreign language at primary school is easier for students than later. This means that at secondary schools, students have to focus more on subjects like science and maths, which would help them get admissions in reputed universities. As a consequence, an additional language will add stress and consume their valuable time. A research conducted by the students of the University of Michigan describes that 80% of students score lesser marks in an English subject in 12th-grade compared to an English paper in tenth-grade because the former students are unable to concentrate on subjects other than technical subjects. Indeed, primary schools are the best time to introduce a foreign language subject where it is positively accepted by students. To conclude, it is clear that foreign languages are best fitted at primary schools. This is because, students have more bandwidth to accommodate a new subject, and also, constant learning and practicing is the key to master a language.
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languages
play a vital role in the development of a child.
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some
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people
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think
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foreign
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language
can
be introduced
in the academic curriculum at the
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primary
level as opposed to secondary. I, completely
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agree
with the statement, and this essay will elaborate on my reasons with relevant examples to support my viewpoint.

To
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begin
with, starting a
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foreign
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language
at
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primary
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school
can lay a strong foundation.
In other words
, more years of learning and practice can result in better fluency and vocabulary.
For example
, in Western countries, children speak and write in English more
comfortably
, whilst children in Asian countries. This is
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because
, English
is taught
in western countries, right from childhood, even when the children have not
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started
to speak.
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, practice and time can
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make
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man
perfect in any language.

Besides
, adding a
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foreign
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language
at
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primary
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school
is easier for
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students
than later. This means that at secondary
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schools
,
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students
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have to
focus more on
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like science and
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maths
, which would
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help
them
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admissions in reputed universities. As a consequence, an additional
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language
will
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add
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stress
and consume their valuable time.
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conducted by the
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students
of the University of Michigan
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describes
that 80% of
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students
score lesser marks in an English
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subject
in 12th-grade compared to an English paper in tenth-grade
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because
the former
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students
are unable to concentrate on
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subjects
other than technical
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subjects
.
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,
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primary
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schools
are the best time to introduce a
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foreign
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language
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where it is
positively
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accepted
by students.

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that
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are best fitted at
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primary
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schools
. This is
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because
,
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students
have more bandwidth to accommodate a new
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subject
, and
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, constant learning and practicing is the key to master a
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language
.
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A man who knows two languages is worth two men.
French Proverb

IELTS essay Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. v. 35

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
300 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
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  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
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