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some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages v.28

some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages v. 28
Children taught foreign languages at primary schools is more beneficial compared to higher level claimed by some authorities. In my opinion, young children are more receptive to multiple languages at a young youth so they should be taught foreign languages at early years. There are many advantages of teaching foreign language at a young age as they will learn the language faster compared to their old age counterparts. The young growing brain is receptive to foreign language and learning curve is easier. In addition, research has proven that the children who learn multiple languages at a young age have expedited growth of the brain. These children are witnesses to perform much better in other aspects of the curriculum as well. Moreover, If children learn foreign language in early years by the time they reach secondary they will already have gained much of expertise in this language. They can be further refined in higher classes so it will result in better job prospects in the future in other countries. The apparent disadvantage that foreign language might have is that expert teachers are required to teach them. These teachers might be scarcely available who could teach foreign languages and if available demand high salaries, which can put severe financial strain on the education system. Hence, it is difficult to arrange for such experienced teachers and the foreign language lectures will remain just a formality with no obvious outcome. Moreover, the time allotted for these foreign language classes may affect the subjects actually important to be learned at schools like mathematics and science subjects. Hence, the students may not be able get give attention to these most important subjects and can have catastrophic results like failing in them. In conclusion, teaching foreign languages in primary school is definitely beneficial to the students in long run when it comes to easy learning and better job prospect
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faster compared to their
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age counterparts. The
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growing brain is receptive to
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and learning curve is easier.
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children
who learn multiple
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age have expedited growth of the brain. These
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. They can be
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might have is that expert teachers
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and if available demand high salaries, which can put severe financial strain on the education system.
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lectures will remain
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classes may affect the subjects actually
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IELTS essay some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages v. 28

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
311 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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