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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v.26

Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 26
Traditionally, children begin studying foreign languages at secondary school. Many individual schools have recommended to study foreign languages at an earlier stage. However this policy may bring some advantages along with some disadvantages. This essay will further discuss whether extending foreign language study to the primary stages is beneficial and if disadvantages may occur in the later stages. Obviously young children pick up languages much more easily than teenagers. Their brains are programmed to learn their mother tongue which also facilitates learning another language. At a young age, children are enthusiastic to explore and to learn new things. The primary timetable should allow more frequent shorter sessions for maintaining learner's enthusiasm and progress. Acquiring foreign languages can also help them to understand other cultures. However, there are some disadvantages. Primary school teachers may not have the necessary language skills or they are not well trained in that particular language. If any language specialist is called then the flexibility of sessions is diminished. Primary language teaching needs to be standardised, so that secondary schools do not face problems in their intake. Failing to undoes the earlier gains. In some situations, it would become very stressful to the child when he has to learn three languages I. e. Native languages and foreign languages. Some researchers have shown from their studies that such children have difficulties in deciding which language to speak and may end up learning nothing, In conclusion, a standardised policy can be adopted at primary schools which can also benefit society culturally and economically. Young children's grasping power can make these benefits more achievable.
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children
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studying
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foreign
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languages
at secondary
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school
.
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individual
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schools
have recommended to study
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foreign
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languages
at an earlier stage.
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However
this policy may bring
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some
advantages along with
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some
disadvantages. This essay will
further
discuss whether extending
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foreign
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language
study to the
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primary
stages is beneficial and if disadvantages may occur in the later stages.

Obviously
young
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children
pick up
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languages
much more
easily
than
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teenagers
. Their brains
are programmed
to learn their mother tongue which
also
facilitates learning another
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language
. At a young age,
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children
are enthusiastic to explore and to learn new things. The
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primary
timetable should
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allow
more frequent shorter sessions for maintaining learner's enthusiasm and progress. Acquiring
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foreign
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languages
can
also
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help
them to understand other cultures.

However
, there are
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some
disadvantages.
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Primary
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school
teachers may not have the necessary
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language
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skills or
they are not
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well trained
in that particular
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language
. If any
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language
specialist
is called
then the flexibility of sessions
is diminished
.
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Primary
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language
teaching needs to be
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standardised
,
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so
that secondary
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schools
do not face problems in their intake. Failing to
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undoes
the earlier gains. In
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some
situations, it would become
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very
stressful to the child when he
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has to
learn three
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languages
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I. e.
Native
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languages
and
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foreign
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languages
.
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researchers have shown from their studies that such
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children
have difficulties in deciding which
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language
to speak and may
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end
up learning nothing,

In conclusion
, a
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standardised
policy can
be adopted
at
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primary
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schools
which can
also
benefit society
culturally
and
economically
. Young children's grasping power can
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make
these benefits more achievable.
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IELTS essay Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages? v. 26

Essay
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4 paragraphs
264 words
6.5
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