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some experts believe that it is better for child to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages. v.1

some experts believe that it is better for child to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages. v. 1
Traditionally, children begin to study foreign languages at secondary academy. Many educations recommended to study foreign languages at an earlier stage. However, this policy may bring some advantages along with some disadvantages. In this essay we will further discuss whether foreign language study is beneficial in primary institute rather than disadvantages may occur in the later stages. Moreover, it is most important to learn a foreign language because it helps to communicate with each other easily. If someone is coming to talk with you then you are not able to speak with them clearly additionally the school education is most necessary to appoint teachers and make the policy standardised However, they make seminars, foreign education sessions which help the students to understand and made their brain programmable so that it can be able to note in their mind thus, they will be more intelligent to deliver in a well manner. The student can be easy to generate a good communication. In addition to, the school does not have good mannered teachers to teach foreign accent, whereas they are not capable of making conversation with each other in a clear way. In secondary institute the child neither has as much brain power nor they will not memorise the things. In some situations, the children may not have ability to decide to speak I. e. Native language or foreign languages and end up learning nothing. To recapitulate it said that, a standardised policy can be adopted by primary school, which can also be beneficial to the society culturally and economically. Young children’s grasping power can make these benefits more achievable.
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, children
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languages
at secondary academy.
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educations recommended to study
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foreign
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languages
at an earlier stage.
However
, this policy may bring
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some
advantages along with
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some
disadvantages. In this essay we will
further
discuss whether
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foreign
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language
study is beneficial in primary institute
rather
than disadvantages may occur in the later stages.

Moreover
, it is most
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important
to learn a
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foreign
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language
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because
it
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helps
to communicate with each other
easily
. If someone is coming to talk with you then you are not able to speak with them
clearly
additionally
the school education is most necessary to appoint teachers and
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make
the policy
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standardised
However
, they
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make
seminars,
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foreign
education sessions which
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help
the students to understand and made their brain programmable
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so
that it can be able to note in their mind
thus
, they will be more intelligent to deliver in a well manner. The student can be easy to generate a
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good
communication.

In addition
to, the school does not have
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good
mannered teachers to teach
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foreign
accent, whereas they are not capable of making conversation with each other in a
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clear
way. In secondary institute the child neither has as much brain
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power nor
they will not
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memorise
the things.
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In
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some
situations, the children may not have ability to decide to speak
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I. e.
Native
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language
or
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foreign
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languages
and
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end
up learning nothing.

To recapitulate it said that, a
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standardised
policy can
be adopted
by primary school, which can
also
be beneficial to the society
culturally
and
economically
. Young children’s grasping power can
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make
these benefits more achievable.
10Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
13Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay some experts believe that it is better for child to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. do the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
268 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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