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Some educationalists think that a programme of international exchange visits will offer various benefits for teenage school students. Do you think the advantages of it outweigh the disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. v.1

Some educationalists think that a programme of international exchange visits will offer various benefits for teenage school students. Do you think the advantages of it outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1
Education means imparting knowledge to a person and there are vast troves of educational resources today. Some educationalists uphold the merits of international student exchange while others have reservation about it. I am on the view that advantages of it overweigh the disadvantages. This essay examines different aspects of this issue. On the one hand, there are some drawbacks of this programme of international exchange, especially among teenage school students. Firstly, it may mislead the students. Since teenagers are young and gullible, they are easily attracted by the temptations and easy prey to pitfalls. Secondly, these exchange visits pave the way to adopt different cultures and lifestyles which are not suitable for our customs and values. In addition, it can be a financial burden to many students. On the other hand, it is fairly easy to understand the numerous benefits of exchange visits at international level. Primarily, it helps to improve the knowledge level. That is these international visits are the platforms for students to acquire new knowledge or information and thereby widen their education horizons. Secondly, these programmes provide a wide range of exposure to the teenagers. From this, they can come to know various students from different countries and they can share their knowledge and information each other. Hence, they exploit to the wide-spread world. Moreover, it helps to mingle with others in the society. Students can identify and understand the various cultures, customs and values of different nations and can acquaint with good values from them to upgrade themselves. In addition, these programmes help in molding of personality and reforms them to more independent and self-reliant. To conclude, when we analyse the issue in depth, it becomes crystal clear that international students exchange programme has more advantages than disadvantages to school students. We should help and advise the students to exercise their prudence and discernment and thus can avoid any pitfall.
Education means imparting
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knowledge
to a person and there are vast troves of educational resources
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today
.
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Some
educationalists uphold the merits of
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international
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student
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exchange
while others have reservation about it. I am on the view that advantages of it
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overweigh
the disadvantages. This essay examines
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different
aspects of this issue.

On the one hand, there are
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some
drawbacks of this
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programme
of
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international
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exchange
,
especially
among teenage school
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students
.
Firstly
, it may mislead the
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students
. Since
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teenagers
are young and gullible, they are
easily
attracted by the temptations and easy prey to pitfalls.
Secondly
, these
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exchange
visits pave the way to adopt
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different
cultures and lifestyles which are not suitable for our customs and values.
In addition
, it can be a financial burden to
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many
students.

On the
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other
hand, it is
fairly
easy to understand the numerous benefits of
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exchange
visits at
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international
level.
Primarily
, it
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helps
to
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improve
the
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knowledge
level.
That is
these
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international
visits are the platforms for
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students
to acquire new
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knowledge
or information and thereby widen their education horizons.
Secondly
, these
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programmes
provide a wide range of exposure to the
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teenagers
. From this, they can
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come
to know various
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students
from
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different
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countries and
they can share their
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knowledge
and information each
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other
.
Hence
, they exploit to the wide-spread world.
Moreover
, it
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helps
to mingle with others in the society.
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Students
can identify and understand the various cultures, customs and values of
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different
nations and can acquaint with
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good
values from them to upgrade themselves.
In addition
, these
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programmes
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help
in molding of personality and reforms them to more independent and self-reliant.

To conclude
, when we
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analyse
the issue in depth, it becomes crystal
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clear
that
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international
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students
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exchange
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programme
has more advantages than disadvantages to school
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students
. We should
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help
and advise the
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students
to exercise their prudence and discernment and
thus
can avoid any pitfall.
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33Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some educationalists think that a programme of international exchange visits will offer various benefits for teenage school students. Do you think the advantages of it outweigh the disadvantages? v. 1

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4 paragraphs
314 words
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