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Many parents believe that when their children read books for entertainment, they are wasting their time, and that they should only read serious, educational books. What is your opinion about this? v.1

Many parents believe that when their children read books for entertainment, they are wasting their time, and that they should only read serious, educational books. What is your opinion about this? v. 1
According to some parents, children ought to read only books with educational importance and reading books for entertainment is a waste of time. In my opinion, children should not be restricted to read only certain genre of books because both the entertainment and educational books serve the purpose of imparting positive skills in children. Some parents think that children should be motivated to read only educational books and not comics and fiction which are not worth their time. They think so because educational books impart knowledge and information that help children with their studies and future progress. Furthermore, these books provide relevant and real information about incidents happening across the globe which eventually enable children to explore the world through books. Undoubtedly, I admit that the role of educational books in children’s intellectual growth is crucial and hence, undeniable. Regarding entertainment books, I do not agree with the view that reading short stories, novels or fiction for fun is a waste of time. The stories and the incidents narrated in these books conspicuously improve children’s creativity and imagination. Moreover, serious facts and events in academic texts can make reading a boring activity for them while entertainment books kindle their interest, boost their reading skills and thus, transform them into voracious readers in future. Unlike academic texts, which contain a plethora of technical terms and usages, the simple language in story books enables children to grasp the ideas easily. In conclusion, educational books are useful for developing children’s intelligence and study skills whereas entertainment books help in their overall development. Therefore, I think that reading entertainment books should not be considered as a waste of time; rather, they should be given the same importance as other books.
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for entertainment is a waste of
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educational
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serve the purpose of imparting
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positive
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skills
in children.

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parents
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educational
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books
and not comics and fiction which are not worth their
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time
. They
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impart knowledge and information that
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help
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children
with their studies and future progress.
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books
provide relevant and real information about incidents happening across the globe which
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enable
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children
to explore the world through
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books
.
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, I admit that the role of
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educational
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books
in
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children’s
intellectual growth is crucial and
hence
, undeniable.

Regarding entertainment
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books
, I do not
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with the view that
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reading
short stories, novels or fiction for fun is a waste of
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time
. The stories and the incidents narrated in these
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books
conspicuously
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improve
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children’s
creativity and imagination.
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in academic texts can
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make
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reading
a boring activity for them while entertainment
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books
kindle their interest, boost their
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reading
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skills
and
thus
, transform them into voracious readers
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books
are useful for developing
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children’s
intelligence and study
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skills
whereas entertainment
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help
in their
overall
development.
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entertainment
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;
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given
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.
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41Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Many parents believe that when their children read books for entertainment, they are wasting their time, and that they should only read serious, educational books. What is your opinion about this? v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
286 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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