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Some countries in the region have been trying to attract more foreign talent to boost their economic competitiveness This has however caused some concern in those countries which are faced with a brain drain where their own talented professionals have lef v.2

Some countries in the region have been trying to attract more foreign talent to boost their economic competitiveness This has however caused some concern in those countries which are faced with a brain drain where their own talented professionals have lef v. 2
The traveling among countries has become increasingly easy in o many problems to the less economically advanced nations in terms of loss of gifted people. First of all, it is an indisputable fact that industrialization and technology which requires high-qualified input of human resources have a vital role to play in the flourish of each economy. When the leading people in these areas m, with more entrepreneurs taking their investments abroad, developing countries are missing an opportunity of wealth creation. This has also negative consequences on tax revenue and employment. Secondly, when the gifted people come to other countries, there will no people to teach and transmit knowledge as well as experience to younger generations. Moreover, many people come to foreign countries and not go to their hometown. They may even bear children and allow them to have foreign nationality. Consequently, gifted genes flow to foreign countries. By ways of conclusion, that some nations have been trying to attract more foreign talent to boost their economic competitiveness will defto appeal experts to greatly contribute to the development of the host countries.
The traveling among
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countries
has become
increasingly
easy in o
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many
problems to the less
economically
advanced nations in terms of loss of gifted
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people
.

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First of all
, it is an indisputable fact that industrialization and technology which requires high-qualified input of human resources have a vital role to play in the flourish of each economy. When the leading
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people
in these areas m, with more entrepreneurs taking their investments abroad, developing
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countries
are missing an opportunity of wealth creation. This has
also
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negative
consequences on tax revenue and employment.

Secondly
, when the gifted
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people
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come
to other
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countries
, there will no
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people
to teach and transmit knowledge
as well
as experience to younger generations.
Moreover
,
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many
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people
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come
to
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foreign
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countries
and not go to their hometown. They may even bear children and
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allow
them to have
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foreign
nationality.
Consequently
, gifted genes flow to
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foreign
countries.

By ways of conclusion, that
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some
nations have been trying to attract more
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foreign
talent to boost their economic competitiveness will
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defto
appeal experts to
greatly
contribute to the development of the host
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countries
.
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2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some countries in the region have been trying to attract more foreign talent to boost their economic competitiveness This has however caused some concern in those countries which are faced with a brain drain where their own talented professionals have lef v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
181 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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