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Some countries are struggling with increases in crime rates. Some believe that having more police on the streets is best way to reduce and combat crime. To what extent do you agree or disagree? v.2

Some countries are struggling with increases in crime rates. Some believe that having more police on the streets is best way to reduce and combat crime. v. 2
The major problem all countries around the world is to reduce the rate of criminal activities. The duty of controlling crime and take criminal into custody is of police. They are responsible to enforce law and order in the society. Some people argue that increasing the number of police officer in street would reduce rate of crime significantly. I partially agree with the given argument. Firstly, increasing the number of police officer in street will definitely discourage criminal to conduct their misdeeds. Furthermore, Police officer will educate and inform general public about legal and illegal conducts. This will eventually make people more aware about actions that are against their constitution. For example, sometime people commit crime because of being unaware of legal status of certain action. Presence of police officer all around the place will eliminate this kind of situation. In contrast, crime doesn't take place only on open places. Voilance being conducted inside building and house cannot be addressed property by policeman on street. Some kind of voilance don't make loud sound. For example, a women constantly beaten and misbehaved by his husband cannot be overtaken through officer on street. It needs alternative solution such as hotline numbers and emergency phone numbers as well as some counselling. In addition, people usually ignore to report, which cause further escalation of the situation and eventually can cause unfortunate result. In conclusion, it's a good idea to increase number of policeman in street in order to maintain law and order in open public space. But, all the crimes are not seen openly. Some crimes are conducted inside four wall which cannot be forseen. Finally, proper access to law enforcers by general public is more important issue.
The major problem all countries around the world is to
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reduce
the rate of criminal activities. The duty of controlling
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crime
and take criminal into custody is of
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police
. They are responsible to enforce law and order in the society.
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Some
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people
argue that increasing the
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number
of
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police
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officer
in
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street
would
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reduce
rate of
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crime
significantly
. I
partially
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agree
with the
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given
argument.

Firstly
, increasing the
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number
of
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police
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officer
in
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street
will definitely discourage criminal to conduct their misdeeds.
Furthermore
,
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Police
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officer
will educate and inform
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general public
about legal and illegal conducts. This will
eventually
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make
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people
more aware about actions that are against their constitution.
For example
, sometime
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people
commit
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crime
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because
of being unaware of legal status of certain action. Presence of
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police
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officer
all around the place will eliminate this kind of situation.

In contrast
,
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crime
doesn't take place
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only
on open places.
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Voilance
being conducted
inside building and
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house
cannot
be addressed
property by policeman on
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street
.
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Some
kind of
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voilance
don't
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make
loud sound.
For example
,
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a women
constantly
beaten and misbehaved by his husband cannot
be overtaken
through
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officer
on
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street
. It needs alternative solution such as hotline
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numbers
and emergency phone
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numbers
as well
as
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some
counselling.
In addition
,
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people
usually
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ignore
to report, which cause
further
escalation of the situation and
eventually
can cause unfortunate result.

In conclusion
, it's a
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good
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idea
to increase
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number
of policeman in
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street
in order to maintain law and order in open public space.
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But
, all the
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crimes
are not
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seen
openly
.
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Some
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crimes
are conducted
inside four
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wall
which cannot be
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forseen
.
Finally
, proper access to law enforcers by
Consider using "public".
general public
is more
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important
issue.
11Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
30Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Mistakes

IELTS essay Some countries are struggling with increases in crime rates. Some believe that having more police on the streets is best way to reduce and combat crime. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
284 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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