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Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion? v.18

Advertisement is the key tool in the market mechanism and merchants are involving Sports in this process. There Currently exist a hot debate on whether involving games in this is good or bad. Although proponents are of notion I vehemently gainsay that advertisements must b keep separated from sports. One school of thought considered it perfect primarily for the reason that people are so much interested in sports and when they watch some products during matches they are most eager to use these products. For Instance, Pepsi gets more familiarization via cricket than merely advertised in newspapers and magazines. Those who have not enough time for a detailed view of different products can see it during their leisure time. However, the other school of thought consider it has a knock-on effect on society. This trend can be attributed to a host of reasons but one very important factor is Sport and advertisement can not be intrinsically linked. because most of the people watching sports are not financially stable and emotionally mature to deal with the nature of the product advertised. To put it concisely, it can be concluded that this issue is not black and white and it has myriads of disadvantage to correlate both.

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are involving
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
Sports
 in this process. There Currently
 exist a hot debate on whether involving games in this is This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
good
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bad
. “Although” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
Although
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must
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keep
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One school of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonedassumedbelievedconsidered
thought
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 for the reason that This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
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so
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sports
 and when they This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :monitor
watch
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some
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products
 during matches they are most eager to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 these You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcommodityprofitbrandworkamountcrop
products
. For Instance
, Pepsi This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquires
gets
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 advertised in newspapers and magazines. Those who have not This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:abundance
enough
 time for a detailed view of This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
different
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products
 can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :witness
see
 it during their leisure time.

However
, the other school of This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonedassumedbelievedconsidered
thought
 consider it has a knock-on effect on society. This trend can be attributed
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but
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very
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important
 factor is You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
Sport
 and advertisement can not be intrinsically
 linked. This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter.Because
because
 most of the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
people
 watching You use this word too often, consider replacing it withfunathleticspastimegame
sports
 are not financially
 stable and emotionally
 mature to deal with the nature of the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcommodityprofitbrandworkamountcrop
product
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, it can be concluded
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white and
 it has myriads of disadvantage to correlate both. 