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Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.13

Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this. v. 13
Although sports sponsorship is thought by some to be a useful way for some companies to showcase their products, other people believe that there are also drawbacks being involved in this. In my opinion, I consider that sponsoring sports events by some companies will greatly benefit these companies to advertise their products and equipment. On the one hand, some people think that companies which sponsor sports events often do a better job in increasing their product sales and I agree. Firstly, sports sponsorship provides increased media exposure for a company and its brands. To put it another way, when companies link their names to successful players, this will help them to be recognized in the sports market and, consequently, raising their sales. Take NIKE corporation as an example, Nike’s online sales jumped 31 percent after the company unveiled its sponsorship of the famous football player Lionel Messi. Furthermore, many people think positively about companies that donate products and equipment because they will make players apply themselves to their sports instead of being distracted by financial worries. On the other hand, it is often believed that when companies link their names to some players, this could bring about more negative results for that company. In other words, the company’s reputation is too tightly linked to a player’s reputation. For instance, a player who does drugs or misbehaves will have negative consequences for a company and vice versa. This will affect product sales and will lead to financial failures. Another reason why these companies are dangerous because some of them have hidden purposes that lie behind these advertisements. They use these events to advertise products harmful to health. To cite an example, tobacco companies, among others, should not be allowed to sponsor events as it will use these events to promote their products which, eventually, give rise to tremendous health issues. In conclusion, many people may vary in their opinion, I think that if companies want to increase both of their product sales and their media exposure, they should link their names to successful players.
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sponsorship is
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some
to be a useful way for
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some
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companies
to showcase their
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products
,
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other
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people
believe that there are
also
drawbacks
being involved
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events
by
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companies
will
greatly
benefit these
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companies
to advertise their
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products
and equipment.

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people
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that
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companies
which sponsor
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sports
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events
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do a better job in increasing their
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product
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sales
and I
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agree
.
Firstly
,
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sports
sponsorship provides increased media exposure for a
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company
and its brands. To put it another way, when
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companies
link their names to successful
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players
, this will
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help
them to
be recognized
in the
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sports
market and,
consequently
, raising their
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sales
. Take NIKE corporation as an example, Nike’s online
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sales
jumped 31 percent after the
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company
unveiled its sponsorship of the
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famous
football
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player
Lionel Messi.
Furthermore
,
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many
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people
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think
positively
about
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companies
that donate
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products
and equipment
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because
they will
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make
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players
apply themselves to their
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sports
instead
of
being distracted
by financial worries.

On the
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hand, it is
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believed that when
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companies
link their names to
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some
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players
, this could bring about more
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negative
results for that
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company
. In
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other
words, the
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company’s
reputation is too
tightly
linked to a
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player’s
reputation.
For instance
, a
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player
who does drugs or misbehaves will have
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negative
consequences for a
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company
and vice versa. This will affect
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product
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sales
and will lead to financial failures. Another reason why these
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companies
are
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dangerous
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because
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some
of them have hidden purposes that lie behind these advertisements. They
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use
these
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events
to advertise
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products
harmful to health. To cite an example, tobacco
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companies
, among others, should not be
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allowed
to sponsor
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events
as it will
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use
these
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events
to promote their
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products
which,
eventually
, give rise to tremendous health issues.

In conclusion
,
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many
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people
may vary in their opinion, I
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think
that if
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companies
want to increase both of their
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product
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sales
and their media exposure, they should link their names to successful
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players
.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes
Language shapes the way we think, and determines what we can think about.
Benjamin Lee Whorf

IELTS essay Some companies sponsor sports as a way to advertise themselves. Some people think it is good, while others think there are disadvantages to this. v. 13

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
343 words
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