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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as science and technology. Discuss both views and give your opinion. v.45

Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as science and technology. v. 45
University education is important to an individual, as well as to national development. Certain demography believes that undergraduates should apply themselves to courses they prefer, while others want them to study only future-relevant subjects. Although this essay will discuss both views, I believe that university students should be given the opportunity to choose their line of career. Firstly, freedom of choice is significant in this part of the world. Therefore, allowing people to choose their university course will give them a sense of accomplishment, thereby increasing their level of responsibility; which in turn results in them upholding the code and ethics of their profession. For instance, Fela Anikulapo-Kuti was an accomplished musician who founded the afro-beat genre, whereas, he was admitted into the university as a Law student at the behest of his father. In summary, graduates feel more successful when they graduate from the course they choose by themselves. Contrary opinions have their reason being futuristic in nature. They believe in sustainable development in science and technology. The advocates of this view believe that more university students studying relevant courses will result in more innovation in such areas. For example, the success of man’s landing on the moon was not possible until the United States government established a tertiary institution that is solely responsible for the teaching and research in space and aeronautic engineering. In conclusion, while it is important to plan for the future, and to encourage students to promote national development, I believe they should be free to make their choices when it comes to choosing university courses.
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University
education is
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important
to an individual,
as well
as to national development. Certain demography
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believes
that undergraduates should apply themselves to
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courses
they prefer, while others want them to study
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only
future-relevant subjects. Although this essay will discuss both views, I
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believe
that
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university
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students
should be
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given
the opportunity to choose their line of career.

Firstly
, freedom of choice is significant in this part of the world.
Therefore
, allowing
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people
to choose their
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university
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course
will give them a sense of accomplishment, thereby increasing their level of responsibility; which in turn results in them upholding the code and ethics of their profession.
For instance
,
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Fela
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Anikulapo-Kuti
was an accomplished musician who founded the
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afro-beat
genre, whereas, he
was admitted
into the
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university
as a Law
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student
at the behest of his father. In summary, graduates feel more successful when they graduate from the
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course
they choose by themselves.

Contrary opinions have their reason being futuristic in nature. They
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believe
in sustainable development in science and technology. The advocates of this view
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believe
that more
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university
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students
studying relevant
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courses
will result in more innovation in such areas.
For example
, the success of
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
man
’s landing on the moon was not possible until the United States
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
government
established a tertiary institution
that is
solely
responsible for the teaching and research in space and aeronautic engineering.

In conclusion
, while it is
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important
to plan for the future, and to encourage
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students
to promote national development, I
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believe
they should be free to
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make
their choices when it
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comes
to choosing
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university
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courses
.
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8Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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IELTS essay Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as science and technology. v. 45

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
261 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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