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Some companies decide not to permit employees to reply the e-mail or text associated with the work in the holiday or on the weekend. Some people think that this policy will improve the satisfaction of the employees. While others argue that banning the rep v.1

Some companies decide not to permit employees to reply the e-mail or text associated with the work in the holiday or on the weekend. Some people think that this policy will improve the satisfaction of the employees. While others argue that banning the rep v. 1
It is undeniable that education plays a vital role in youngster's life; however, some school leavers hold a negative opinion about the learning system. This essay will discuss the causative factors of this issue and put forward several remedies to solve the problem. There are two significant reasons why some people hold a negative attitude towards learning. Firstly, the vast majority of students are forced to study the dispassionate course. Even in this modern society, despite children objections, many parents are taking their children's academic for granted, and persuading them to study which they are not interested in. For example, children who determined to become a dancer or artist, supposed to study engineering subjects due to their parents compel. Another problem that needs to be considered is job opportunities. It is unquestionably true that in many nations only two-third of graduates are securing a job which is related to their course, others opt to irrelevant, low wage professions. Consequently, they end up developing a sense of hatred towards learning However, society can take counter actions to deter teenagers from possessing this stereotype towards education. Students should have the freedom to determine their future. Despite having control over children, parents should allow them to make decisions independently. For instance, if a child possesses a great skill in football, and wants to take it further level parents should support rather than insist to focus on studies. Also, the educational institutes should conduct career instruction programs to guide students to obtain a job in their core firm. In conclusion, this essay discussed the primary causes of the problem and suggested some corrective actions as a solution. I believe, in the future, parents and education centres would join together to prevent children from holding negative thought of learning.
It is undeniable that education plays a vital role in youngster's life;
however
,
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some
This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
school leavers
hold a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
opinion about the learning system. This essay will discuss the causative factors of this issue and put forward several remedies to solve the problem.

There are two significant reasons why
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
hold a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
attitude towards learning.
Firstly
, the vast majority of students
are forced
to
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study
the dispassionate course. Even in this modern society, despite
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
objections,
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
are taking their children's academic for granted, and persuading them to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
which they are not interested in.
For example
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
who determined to become a dancer or artist, supposed to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
study
engineering subjects due to their
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
compel. Another problem that needs to
be considered
is job opportunities. It is
unquestionably
true that in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
nations
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
two-third of graduates are securing a job which
is related
to their course, others opt to irrelevant, low wage professions.
Consequently
, they
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
end
up developing a sense of hatred towards learning

However
, society can take counter actions to deter
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
teenagers
from possessing this stereotype towards education. Students should have the freedom to determine their future. Despite having control over
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
children
,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
should
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
them to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
decisions
independently
.
For instance
, if a child possesses a great
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
in football, and wants to take it
further
level
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
should support
rather
than
The usual collocation for "insist" is "on" not "to". Did you mean "insist on focusing", "insist on focussing"?
insist to focus
on
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
studies
.
Also
, the educational institutes should conduct career instruction programs to guide students to obtain a job in their core firm.

In conclusion
, this essay discussed the primary causes of the problem and suggested
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
corrective actions as a solution. I believe, in the future,
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
parents
and education
Possible spelling mistake. 'centres' is British English.
centres
would
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join
together to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
prevent
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children
from holding
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
negative
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
of learning.
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some companies decide not to permit employees to reply the e-mail or text associated with the work in the holiday or on the weekend. Some people think that this policy will improve the satisfaction of the employees. While others argue that banning the rep v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
294 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
  • ?
    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
  • ?
    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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