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Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions. v.7

Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions. v. 7
Interpersonal skills like effective communication, problem solving, decision making and conflict management are very important to succeed in business. But, a lot of corporate houses complain that the new batch of young employees lacks these basic skills. This essay will discuss the main causes of this problem and suggest possible solutions to overcome this issue. To begin with, there are multiple reasons for the lack of soft skills in the new candidates, but the two main reasons are the current education system and the lack of focus on interpersonal skills. The education system lacks a syllabus that incorporates soft skills as a main subject, it is always treated as a voluntary subject and more emphasis is laid upon the technical studies like Math and Science. To exemplify, if there is a class on developing communication skills, it will prepare the students to translate their knowledge and ideas effectively. However, the two main solutions to surpass this issue are to implement a course on personality development, effective communication, decision making, as a part of the curriculum. Secondly, the parents need to provide their children practical training by giving them daily tasks to manage the household activities like buying the groceries, managing and dealing with the domestic help and vendors. For example, a recent study confirms that parents who made their children manage the household activities like buying groceries and dealing with the vendors improved their decision making capacity and negotiation skills. Such activities enabled them to become better negotiators and communicators. To conclude, many businesses find their new talent to be lacking interpersonal skills mainly due to the existing educational system and more emphasis on technical studies. However, this essay suggested that by implementing vocational training courses in schools and practical training by parents at home can enhance the personality of the young adults and prepare them for the future.
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decision making
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complain that the new batch of young employees
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lacks
these basic
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skills
. This essay will discuss the
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main
causes of this problem and suggest possible solutions to overcome this issue.

To
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begin
with, there are multiple reasons for the
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lack
of soft
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skills
in the new candidates,
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but
the two
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main
reasons are the
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current
education system and the
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lack
of focus on interpersonal
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skills
. The education system
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lacks
a syllabus that incorporates soft
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skills
as a
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main
subject, it is always treated as a voluntary subject and more emphasis
is laid
upon the technical studies like Math and Science. To exemplify, if there is a
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class
on developing communication
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skills
, it will prepare the students to translate their knowledge and
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ideas
effectively
.

However
, the two
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main
solutions to surpass this issue are to implement a course on personality development, effective communication,
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decision making
, as a part of the curriculum.
Secondly
, the parents need to provide their children practical training by giving them daily tasks to manage the household activities like buying the groceries, managing and dealing with the domestic
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help
and vendors.
For example
, a recent study confirms that parents who made their children manage the household activities like buying groceries and dealing with the vendors
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improved
their
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decision making
capacity and negotiation
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skills
. Such activities enabled them to become better negotiators and communicators.

To conclude
,
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many
businesses find their new talent to be lacking interpersonal
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skills
mainly
due to the existing educational system and more emphasis on technical studies.
However
, this essay suggested that by implementing vocational training courses in schools and practical training by parents at home can enhance the personality of the young adults and prepare them for the future.
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IELTS essay Some businesses find that their new employees lack basic interpersonal skills such as cooperative skills. What are the causes? Suggest possible solutions. v. 7

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
8
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 8.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 8.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 8.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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