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Some people feel that the cost of space exploration is far too high for the benefits it brings while others argue that the space programmes should continue no matter what the cost. Discuss both sides and give your opinion. v.3

Some people feel that the cost of space exploration is far too high for the benefits it brings while others argue that the space programmes should continue no matter what the cost. v. 3
It is true that a huge fund is required for space exploration. However, while some believe the amount required for exploring the space is vast for getting the benefits, I agree with those who believe that we should continue such programmes without thinking of the cost. On the one hand, it is argued that the funding required for the exploration of space is enormous before it brings advantages to our life. It is believed that each country is facing a lot of issues, such as, poverty, illiteracy, and poor infrastructure, which needs to be addressed first. In other words, the government should invest its funds to solve such issues before any funds are allocated for the research of space. Moreover, the authority is to collect the fund in the form of taxation from the taxpayers for the welfare of the nation, and if such amount is expended on the space mission, there will be the shortage of fund for the development. On the other hand, I would argue that no matter how much amount is required for the study of space we should continue. I believe that billions of amount is invested in the training and educating astronauts and building rockets for such space mission, however, we could enjoy the benefits of using advanced technology in our lives, which are invented through such missions. For instance, we are using the technology of GPS in our 4G mobiles which helps us to navigate the routes while travelling. Besides this, in my opinion, the most benefit we get is that we could find the planet for human habitats, as the issue of global warming has affected our lives to live on the Earth. In conclusion, although it is undeniable that the government should spend their funds on those issues which require utmost attention rather than on the mission of space, our life gets more advanced than earlier due to the space research. Therefore, on balance, I believe that for the benefits to the humankind the study towards space should be continued without worrying about the costs.
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space
exploration.
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, while
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some
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believe
the
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amount
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required
for exploring the
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space
is vast for getting the
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benefits
, I
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agree
with those who
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believe
that we should continue such
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programmes
without thinking of the cost.

On the one hand, it
is argued
that the funding
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required
for the exploration of
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space
is enormous
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before
it brings advantages to our life. It
is believed
that each country is facing
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a lot of
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issues
, such as, poverty, illiteracy, and poor infrastructure, which needs to
be addressed
first
.
In other words
, the
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government
should invest its funds to solve such
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issues
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before
any funds
are allocated
for the research of
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space
.
Moreover
, the authority is to collect the
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fund
in the form of taxation from the taxpayers for the welfare of the nation, and if such
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amount
is expended
on the
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space
mission, there will be the shortage of
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fund
for the development.

On the other hand
, I would argue that no matter how much
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amount
is
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required
for the study of
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space
we should continue. I
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believe
that billions of
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amount
is invested
in the training and educating astronauts and building rockets for such
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space
mission,
however
, we could enjoy the
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benefits
of using advanced technology in our
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lives
, which
are invented
through such missions.
For instance
, we are using the technology of GPS in our 4G mobiles which
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helps
us to navigate the routes while travelling.
Besides
this, in my opinion, the most
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benefit
we
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get
is that we could find the planet for human habitats, as the
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issue
of global warming has
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affected
our
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lives
to
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live
on the Earth.

In conclusion
, although it is undeniable that the
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government
should spend their funds on those
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issues
which require utmost attention
rather
than on the mission of
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space
, our life
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gets
more advanced than earlier due to the
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space
research.
Therefore
, on balance, I
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believe
that for the
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benefits
to the humankind the study towards
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space
should
be continued
without worrying about the costs.
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IELTS essay Some people feel that the cost of space exploration is far too high for the benefits it brings while others argue that the space programmes should continue no matter what the cost. v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
344 words
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