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Nowadays air travel is cheaper than in the past. Is this a positive or a negative development? Discuss and give your own opinion. v.1

Nowadays air travel is cheaper than in the past. Is this a positive or a negative development? Discuss and give your own opinion. v. 1
There is no sceptisim travelling by air has become very affordable in comparison to previous years. In my opinion, I cosider it as both positive development and negative development because it connects us with other parts of this world in very fast and quick manner and also the cause of air pollution. To start with, The prime reason to consider air travel as a positive occurance because it has made our journey very quick by saving our lots of time. To elaborate, in big country, such as India, the time taken to travel from one city to another has reduced significantly with the developments in aeroplane services. Secondly, aeroplanes has given a chance to flourish their business globally because a person can reach any part of the world to make networks for trade. For example, it has been clearly seen that Increase in flights internationally has been direcly linked sharp rise in trade between two nations. Furthermore, on the downside, in this contemporary time, emission through airplanes is one of the biggest cause of air pollution. Recent survey has shown that toxic level of air has gone up by two percent in the last five years. It is not only cause of air pollution, but also noise pollution too. Moreover, this way of commuting is using exahustible source of fuel at alarming rate. In one trip a plane use gallons of fuels which can be used by hundreds of cars to keep moving. It is cerainly true taht everything has its own positives and negatives. It depends upon us how wisely we use the things to maximise its benefits and reduce its drawbacks. In conclusion, Increasing air travel is a both postive and negative development. it depends upon human how to use it effectively and to strika a balance,
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travelling by
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air
has become
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very
affordable
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cosider
it as both
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positive
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development
and
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negative
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development
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because
it connects us with other parts of this world in
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very
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fast
and quick manner and
also
the cause of
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air
pollution.

To
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start
with, The prime reason to consider
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air
travel as a
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positive
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occurance
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because
it has made our journey
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very
quick by saving our lots of time. To elaborate, in
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big
country, such as India, the time taken to travel from one city to another has
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reduced
significantly
with the
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developments
in
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aeroplane
services.
Secondly
,
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aeroplanes
has
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given
a chance to flourish their business globally
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because
a person can reach any part of the world to
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make
networks for trade.
For example
, it has been
clearly
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seen
that Increase in flights
internationally
has been
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direcly
linked sharp rise in trade between two nations.

Furthermore
, on the downside, in this contemporary time, emission through airplanes is one of the biggest cause of
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air
pollution. Recent survey has shown that toxic level of
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air
has gone up by two percent in the last five years. It is not
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only
cause of
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air
pollution,
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but
also
noise pollution too.
Moreover
, this way of commuting is using
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exahustible
source of fuel at alarming rate. In one trip a
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plane
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use
gallons of fuels which can be
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used
by hundreds of cars to
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keep
moving. It is
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cerainly
true
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taht
everything has its
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own
positives and negatives. It depends upon us how
wisely
we
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use
the things to
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maximise
its benefits and
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reduce
its drawbacks.

In conclusion
, Increasing
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air
travel is a both
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postive
and
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negative
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development
.
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it
depends upon human how to
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use
it
effectively
and to
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strika
a balance,
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IELTS essay Nowadays air travel is cheaper than in the past. Is this a positive or a negative development? Discuss and give your own opinion. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
299 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.0
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