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Some believe that the best way to stay fit is to join a gym or health club while others think doing everyday activities such as walking and climbing stairs is enough. Discuss both views and give your own opinion. v.2

Some believe that the best way to stay fit is to join a gym or health club while others think doing everyday activities such as walking and climbing stairs is enough. v. 2
Staying fit is the requisite to enjoy a healthy and stress-free life, whether fitness is achieved by joining a fitness club or by burning calories through routine activities remain a debatable issue. The idea behind both is to stay healthy. In my opinion, fitness is a personal goal if staying healthy and maintaining a reasonably attractive body remain the goal, leading a physically active lifestyle is enough. However, hitting the athletic facility is the unique option if a person wants a perfect body with the washboard ABS along with staying healthy. Whether or not a person ought to join a fitness centre depends on their fitness goals. In these times, many youths are attracted by their fitness role models and many celebrities; they intend to achieve the same fitness level. It is impossible to accomplish the same fitness without joining a gymnasium and making adequate changes in lifestyle and dietary habits. The ideal body with zero fats is not a typical phenomenon and as such it is impractical to realize it by carrying out routine activities alone. On the other hand, to eliminate excess body fat and to stay healthy, active lifestyles are beneficial. Doing errands on foot, walking to the bus stop and opting to take the staircase are the ways to consume calories which helps to stay in shape. There are smart watches to monitor physical activity which means that there is less need than ever to set aside gym time. An individual can set a goal and strive to achieve it, and these goals, encourage them to become more aware of their daily habits and slowly change or supplement them. Moreover, adapting agile way of life eliminates the need of typical, dedicated workouts. In conclusion, going to the gymnasium is crucial to being in good shape. Active habits ranging from good nutrition to taking part in sports to making time for the gym are important checks against the inclination towards a passive, sedentary lifestyle.
Staying fit is the requisite to enjoy a
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healthy
and
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stress
-free life, whether
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fitness
is achieved
by joining a
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fitness
club or by burning calories through routine activities remain a debatable issue. The
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idea
behind both is to stay
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healthy
. In my opinion,
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fitness
is a personal
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goal
if staying
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healthy
and maintaining a
reasonably
attractive
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body
remain the
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goal
, leading a
physically
active
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lifestyle
is
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enough
.
However
, hitting the athletic facility is the unique option if a person wants a perfect
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body
with the washboard ABS along with staying healthy.

Consider shortening this phrase to just "Whether". It is correct though if you mean 'regardless of whether'.
Whether or not
a person ought to
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join
a
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fitness
Possible spelling mistake. 'centre' is British English.
centre
depends on their
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fitness
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goals
. In these times,
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many
youths
are attracted
by their
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fitness
role models and
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many
celebrities; they intend to achieve the same
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fitness
level. It is impossible to accomplish the same
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fitness
without joining a gymnasium and making adequate
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changes
in
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lifestyle
and dietary habits. The ideal
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body
with zero fats is not a typical phenomenon and as such it is impractical to realize it by carrying out routine activities alone.

On the other hand
, to eliminate excess
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body
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fat
and to stay
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healthy
, active
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lifestyles
are beneficial. Doing errands on foot, walking to the bus
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stop
and opting to take the staircase are the ways to consume calories which
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helps
to stay in shape. There are smart
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watches
to monitor physical activity which means that there is less need than ever to set aside gym time. An individual can set a
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goal
and strive to achieve it, and these
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goals
, encourage them to become more aware of their daily habits and
slowly
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change
or supplement them.
Moreover
, adapting agile way of life eliminates the need of typical, dedicated workouts.

In conclusion
, going to the gymnasium is crucial to being in
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good
shape. Active habits ranging from
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
nutrition to taking part in sports to making time for the gym are
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important
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checks
against the inclination towards a passive, sedentary
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lifestyle
.
4Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS essay Some believe that the best way to stay fit is to join a gym or health club while others think doing everyday activities such as walking and climbing stairs is enough. v. 2

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
327 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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