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Some people believe that the age limit for the drivers should be increased to ensure road safety. To what extent do you agree or disagree. v.1

Some people believe that the age limit for the drivers should be increased to ensure road safety. v. 1
It is trusted by many individuals that the minimum legal age for the drivers should be enhanced so as to mitigate the road accidents. I partially agree with this statement because apart from increasing age limit, there are other methods which can ensure safety on the roads. This essay will discuss various reasons behind this viewpoint. The first viewpoint is that raising the age of drivers will help in regulating those youngsters who are immature and have less skills of driving. These teenagers drive harsh and carelessly without considering other vehicles on the road. However, older people are more experienced and drive smoothly. For example, statistics of police department of a developed country reported that 75% of the accidents happened due to carelessness of the driver. On the flip side, besides increasing age there are other ways to ensure road safety. Firstly, license permit rules should be made strict enough so as to make difficult to gain it. This should be given by qualifying all other factors such as experience, age, knowledge of handling problems arising at unusual times. Secondly, traffic rules should be tougher and huge fines and penalties should be applicable on the person violating such regulations. These are some methods which can help in road safety. To recapitulate, though proliferation of minimum age of driving is effective to some extent, but other alternatives such as strict traffic rules and license permit rules should also be considered. This helps in reducing the number of accidents on road and will also help in the development of the nation.
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is trusted
by
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many
individuals that the minimum legal
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age
for the drivers should
be enhanced
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so as to
mitigate the
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road
accidents. I
partially
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agree
with this statement
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because
apart from increasing
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age
limit, there are
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other
methods which can ensure safety on the
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roads
. This essay will discuss various reasons behind this viewpoint.

The
first
viewpoint is that raising the
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age
of drivers will
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help
in regulating those youngsters who are immature and have
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less
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skills
of driving. These
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teenagers
drive harsh and
carelessly
without considering
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other
vehicles on the
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road
.
However
, older
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people
are more experienced and drive
smoothly
.
For example
, statistics of police department of a
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developed country
reported that 75% of the accidents happened due to carelessness of the driver.

On the flip side,
besides
increasing
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age
there are
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other
ways to ensure
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road
safety.
Firstly
, license permit
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rules
should
be made
strict
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enough
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so as to
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make
difficult to gain it. This should be
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given
by qualifying all
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other
factors such as experience,
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age
, knowledge of handling problems arising at unusual times.
Secondly
, traffic
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rules
should be tougher and huge fines and penalties should be applicable on the person violating such regulations. These are
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some
methods which can
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help
in
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road
safety.

To recapitulate, though proliferation of minimum
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age
of driving is effective to
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some
extent,
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but
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other
alternatives such as strict traffic
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rules
and license permit
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rules
should
also
be considered
. This
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helps
in reducing the number of accidents on
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road
and will
also
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help
in the development of the nation.
8Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
25Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes
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Roger Ascham

IELTS essay Some people believe that the age limit for the drivers should be increased to ensure road safety. v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
259 words
6
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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