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Some believe that it is the responsibility of people to take care of the environment. Others say it is the government that should take care of the environment. Discuss v.3

Some believe that it is the responsibility of people to take care of the environment. Others say it is the government that should take care of the environment. Discuss v. 3
These days, environmental care has become the centre of global debates. Some people believe that the government alone is responsible for protecting the climate. On the other hand, environmentalists argue that every individual being must play their own part in looking after the landscape. In this essay, I will discuss both viewpoints and draw a conclusion. On the one hand, some people think that the state and central authorities ought to take care of the surroundings. They point to the fact that individual's effort cannot make a gigantic difference and it is the state who needs to carry out or make big decisions, which can help to save the situation. For instance, the decision to ban old diesel cars which emit too much carbon emission; In addition, Governments have a power to control factories and impose law for protection of the environment. Government should encourage Factories to produce environmental friendly products by providing financial supported and giving tax advantages. If ministry takes such action, then it leads to betterment of nature. Moreover, there is a common belief that if every human being starts taking small efforts it can make a gigantic difference For instance, if people avoid purchasing products with excess packaging, it will force suppliers to produce less plastic packaging, thereby it reduces pollution by the small decision of human beings and can help in controlling the pollution caused by non-biodegradable waste" In Conclusion, healthy atmosphere is essential for every individual and every step taken for its betterment would benefit everyone. I believe everyone has a responsibility to save the planet. Personally, I think that law has the edge to bring change at a larger scale through big decisions. "
These days, environmental care has become the
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centre
of global debates.
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Some
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people
believe that the
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government
alone is responsible for protecting the climate.
On the other hand
, environmentalists argue that every individual being
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must
play their
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own
part in looking after the landscape. In this essay, I will discuss both viewpoints and draw a conclusion.

On the one hand,
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some
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people
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think
that the state and central authorities ought to take care of the surroundings. They point to the fact that individual's effort cannot
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make
a gigantic difference and it is the state who needs to carry out or
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make
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big
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decisions
, which can
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help
to save the situation.
For instance
, the
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decision
to ban
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old
diesel cars which emit too much carbon emission;
In addition
,
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Governments
have a power to control factories and impose law for protection of the environment.
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Government
should encourage Factories to produce environmental friendly products by providing financial supported and giving tax advantages. If ministry takes such action, then it leads to betterment of nature.

Moreover
, there is a common belief that if every human being
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starts
taking
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small
efforts it can
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make
a gigantic difference
For instance
, if
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people
avoid purchasing products with excess packaging, it will force suppliers to produce less plastic packaging, thereby it
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reduces
pollution by the
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small
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
decision
of human beings and can
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help
in controlling the pollution caused by non-biodegradable waste
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"


In Conclusion
, healthy atmosphere is essential for every individual and every step taken for its betterment would benefit everyone. I believe everyone has a responsibility to save the planet.
Personally
, I
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think
that law has the edge to bring
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change
at a larger scale through
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
big
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
decisions
.
Use a smart opening quote here: "“".
"
7.5Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
7.5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7.5Mistakes

IELTS essay Some believe that it is the responsibility of people to take care of the environment. Others say it is the government that should take care of the environment. Discuss v. 3

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
280 words
7.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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  • Include an introduction and conclusion
  • Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
  • Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 7.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 7.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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