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some believe that eventually all jobs will be done by arifically intelligence robots. opinion v.1

some believe that eventually all jobs will be done by arifically intelligence robots. opinion v. 1
Some jobs are already done by robots. However, I do not believe that all jobs will eventually be performed by such devices for several reasons. Robots are expensive and incapable of doing certain jobs that require special skills. Government regulations will also prevent their large scale deployment. If a man can do a job as well as a robot, I see no justification for replacing the man with a robot. Robots are suitable for certain jobs, but they have plenty of limitations too. To begin with, the cost of operating and maintaining robots is extremely high. This is a great reason for employers to continue to prefer humans over robots. For example, the cost of installing a robot in a Khartoum-based supermarket was around one million U. S. dollars. The robot will require decades to deliver services worth its cost. Furthermore, in order to keep these devices working continuously, companies will have to employ skilled operators. This will further increase their cost of operation and make human workers indispensable in the labour market. There are also certain jobs that require the human touch. For instance, robots cannot do a good job in sectors like medicine, engineering or social service because of their inability to understand human feelings, needs and wants. Unemployment is another factor that discourages the deployment of robots on a large scale. If robots are deployed in all sectors people will lose their jobs. As we already know, unemployment has an adverse effect on the society. To prevent this situation, the government may also bring about legislation that requires companies to employ humans instead of robots. To sum up, robots may be getting smarter; however, in my opinion, they will never completely replace humans in the workplace. Of course, there are sectors where only robots can be employed. In other sectors, humans will continue to be employed.
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by such devices for several reasons. Robots are expensive and incapable of doing certain
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jobs
that
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require
special
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skills
.
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regulations will
also
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prevent
their large scale deployment.

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man
can do a
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as well
as a robot, I
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no justification for replacing the
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man
with a robot. Robots are suitable for certain
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jobs
,
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but
they have
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plenty
of limitations too. To
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with, the
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cost
of operating and maintaining robots is
extremely
high. This is a great reason for employers to continue to prefer
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humans
over robots.
For example
, the
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cost
of installing a robot in a Khartoum-based supermarket was around one million U. S. dollars. The robot will
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require
decades to deliver services worth its
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cost
.
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, in order to
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these devices working
continuously
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employ skilled operators. This will
further
increase their
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cost
of operation and
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human
workers indispensable in the
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market.

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also
certain
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jobs
that
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require
the
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human
touch.
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, robots cannot do a
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good
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job
in
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sectors
like medicine, engineering or social service
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because
of their inability to understand
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human
feelings, needs and wants. Unemployment is another factor that discourages the deployment of robots on a large scale.
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If
robots
are deployed
in all
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sectors
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people
will lose their
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jobs
. As we already know, unemployment has an adverse effect on the society. To
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prevent
this situation, the
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government
may
also
bring about legislation that
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requires
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companies
to employ
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humans
instead
of robots.

To sum up, robots may be getting smarter;
however
, in my opinion, they will never completely replace
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humans
in the workplace.
Of course
, there are
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sectors
where
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only
robots can
be employed
. In other
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sectors
,
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humans
will continue to
be employed
.
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27Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
3Mistakes

IELTS essay some believe that eventually all jobs will be done by arifically intelligence robots. opinion v. 1

Essay
  American English
4 paragraphs
309 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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